It is unaccepted that people who work in certain professions, e.g. finance, media, entertainment and sport, are paid such high salaries while others, who do more important jobs in society, are underpaid.
To what extent do you agree or disagree?
There has been a growing argument that those working in high-profile professions can earn an astonishing amount of money compared to the others, which is unfair. In this essay I will discuss why these people deserve such admirably financial rewards.
The are several reasons why footballers, celebrities or high-flyers in finance have high income. Anyone who reach highest level of these fields must be uniquely gifted individuals. In addition, even the most talented must undergo many years of training to develop the skills required, and this takes great commitment, dedication, and passion. Another obvious reason is the huge profit in the region of millions of dollars they can create thanks to their talents and influence. Take football superstar Cristiano Ronaldo as an example, it can be argued that this player deserves a wage that reflects his ability and dedication. Since his stunning return, both Manchester United and Premier League have achieved far more significant benefits in financial terms.
Having said that, I agree that people who do prestigious jobs in society such as doctors or teachers are underpaid. Although they do not create obvious economic value, their contributions to the development of society are undeniable. Moreover, the flashiness and the fame can mislead young people and motivate them to pursue their dream of becoming a star rather than a doctor or an engineer. Having said that, considerably financial rewards often come at a price, whether that involves the loss of privacy for celebrities, or long working days in the case of successful financiers.
In conclusion, I can see no reason why people in high-profile positions should not be paid as well as they usually are. Granted, others in society earns too little for the important work they do, but it shouldn’t mean that these talented individuals are paid less. These high earners create happiness and act as role models for the young, often while their own privacy and well-being suffers.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 1, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...ve such admirably financial rewards. The are several reasons why footballers, celebr...
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Line 3, column 109, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[2]
Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'reach the highest'.
Suggestion: reach the highest
...in finance have high income. Anyone who reach highest level of these fields must be uniquely ...
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Line 7, column 108, Rule ID: ADVERB_WORD_ORDER[5]
Message: The adverb 'usually' is usually put after the verb 'are'.
Suggestion: are usually
...ions should not be paid as well as they usually are. Granted, others in society earns too l...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, moreover, so, well, while, in addition, in conclusion, such as, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 10.4138276553 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 24.0651302605 133% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 27.0 41.998997996 64% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1681.0 1615.20841683 104% => OK
No of words: 320.0 315.596192385 101% => OK
Chars per words: 5.253125 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.22948505376 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76302137331 2.80592935109 98% => OK
Unique words: 204.0 176.041082164 116% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.6375 0.561755894193 113% => OK
syllable_count: 508.5 506.74238477 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 0.809619238477 494% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 28.8510350286 49.4020404114 58% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 112.066666667 106.682146367 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.3333333333 20.7667163134 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.53333333333 7.06120827912 78% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.203457770001 0.244688304435 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0664648565161 0.084324248473 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0785332609353 0.0667982634062 118% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.116573274712 0.151304729494 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0484479713433 0.056905535591 85% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.0 13.0946893788 107% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 50.2224549098 100% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.17 12.4159519038 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.32 8.58950901804 109% => OK
difficult_words: 94.0 78.4519038076 120% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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