Lots of young people nowadays have more information about worldwide celebrities in the music and movie industry than about well-known people in their nation
A large number of young people nowadays have more information about worldwide celebrities in the music and movie industry than about well-known people in their nation. This essay will outline the reasons why this issue is occurring, and offer some measure to tackle this problem.
Firstly, this phenomenon exits simply because the media namely television and magazines show much information about foreign celebrities. To solve this problem, enhancing the presence of famous historical people in the sector is a good solution. To illustrate, the government should encourage people to make more television shows as well as movies about their national heroes. Thus young people could have more opportunities to know more about historical people in daily life.
Equally important is that the cause leading to this problem would be that history subject would be boring and ineffective for the students. In this situation, changing the teaching method in history could be effective. For instance, the school should provide the student with more documentaries as well as field trips rather than books. Consequence, students could not only study better at history but also acquire more knowledge about people in the past.
Lastly, the last reason for this problematic situation could be that students spend a huge amount of time on social networks and media at home while they do not pay more attention to the key subject like math and foreign languages at school. In evidence, because of the importance of history, the government should make it a compulsory test in the national university entrance examination. Therefore, the student would give more efforts to study history at school.
In conclusion, it is clear that there are different reasons for this tendency and possible approaches should be considered to tackle with this problem.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, if, lastly, so, therefore, thus, well, while, for instance, in conclusion, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 7.85571142285 153% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 19.0 24.0651302605 79% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 41.998997996 93% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.3376753507 168% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1546.0 1615.20841683 96% => OK
No of words: 291.0 315.596192385 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.31271477663 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.13022058845 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69486367785 2.80592935109 96% => OK
Unique words: 162.0 176.041082164 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.556701030928 0.561755894193 99% => OK
syllable_count: 481.5 506.74238477 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 6.0 2.52805611222 237% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.1241059408 49.4020404114 81% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.428571429 106.682146367 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.7857142857 20.7667163134 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.0 7.06120827912 113% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.01903807615 139% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.365032744191 0.244688304435 149% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.143759743482 0.084324248473 170% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.232130888253 0.0667982634062 348% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.21436007045 0.151304729494 142% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.213722021308 0.056905535591 376% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.0 13.0946893788 107% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.72 50.2224549098 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.52 12.4159519038 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.54 8.58950901804 99% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 78.4519038076 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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