In many countries people are concerned about the number of children who are overweight.What do you think are the causes of this?What solutions can you suggest?

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In many countries people are concerned about the number of children who are overweight.
What do you think are the causes of this?
What solutions can you suggest?

Submitted by Thu Ngo on Tue, 01/17/2017 - 09:03

Ganning weight in proportion of children is arguably a considerable problem which leads to lots of serious heath issues.I myself think that there are numerous causes out there and the followings are some of them.
Undoubtebly, most of outweight children are heavily influenced by food or bevarage commercials which still influences us,adult persons.For instance,thousands of exquisite food commercials are being broadcasted on social media

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
so, still, for instance

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 13.1623246493 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 7.85571142285 0% => OK
Conjunction : 2.0 10.4138276553 19% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 3.0 7.30460921844 41% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 5.0 24.0651302605 21% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 41.998997996 24% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 2.0 8.3376753507 24% => More nominalization wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 377.0 1615.20841683 23% => More number of characters wanted.
No of words: 64.0 315.596192385 20% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.890625 5.12529762239 115% => OK
Fourth root words length: 2.82842712475 4.20363070211 67% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.37206903983 2.80592935109 120% => OK
Unique words: 52.0 176.041082164 30% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.8125 0.561755894193 145% => OK
syllable_count: 111.6 506.74238477 22% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 5.43587174349 18% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.384769539078 0% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 4.76152304609 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 2.0 16.0721442886 12% => Need more sentences, or put a space between two sentences.
Sentence length: 32.0 20.2975951904 158% => OK
Sentence length SD: 6.5 49.4020404114 13% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 188.5 106.682146367 177% => OK
Words per sentence: 32.0 20.7667163134 154% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.5 7.06120827912 163% => OK
Paragraphs: 2.0 4.38176352705 46% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 0.0 8.67935871743 0% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0585944544537 0.244688304435 24% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0456728485167 0.084324248473 54% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0267679707337 0.0667982634062 40% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0456728485167 0.151304729494 30% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0267679707337 0.056905535591 47% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 22.3 13.0946893788 170% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 30.54 50.2224549098 61% => OK
smog_index: 0.0 7.44779559118 0% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 17.0 11.3001002004 150% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 17.47 12.4159519038 141% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 11.14 8.58950901804 130% => OK
difficult_words: 24.0 78.4519038076 31% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 17.5 9.78957915832 179% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.8 10.1190380762 146% => OK
text_standard: 18.0 10.7795591182 167% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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More content wanted.
Minimum four paragraphs wanted.
Minimum 250 words wanted.

Rates: 22.4719101124 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 2.0 Out of 9
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