In many countries today, people in big cities either live alone or in small family units, rather than in large, extended family groups. Is this a positive or a negative trend?
It is strongly argued that nowadays, people in major cities tend to undergohave a changes in the family structures, from multi-generation families to single or nuclear families. In my opinion, I am more convinced that living in such small families bring s us many practical benefits in terms of both mental and economical aspects, as we are now living in a densely-populated area.
The first advantage that needs to be taken into account is that, many big cites usually have limited space, thus resulting inmaking an increase in housing prices as well as rental costs. As a result, people in most urban areas would find it difficult to afford good accommodations for their huge families, whereas there are lots of apartments and modern houses for smaller families, as the prices of these real estates are more lower economica l than those of big houses. Furthermore, city dwellers in nuclear families wouldn’t have to suffer from other financial burdens as much as those living in extended families. For example, if they don’t live with their parents or relatives, their daily costs can be reduced as they only need to take care for their children. Therefore, children in these families would receive a better welfare in both physical and mental nourishments.
Another main cause of this trend is that, the mental well-being of people living in small groups would be improved. Living a single life or being in a nuclear family will help people to avoid conflicts arising from the generation gaps as well as supervisions from older family members. This will not only create a good sense of independence for every individual, but also encourage people with more freedom to express themselves whenever they are at home. People nowadays are having more and more pressures in their workplaces or even in schools;, therefore, they need to have time as well as a comfort zone to take off their amours and to share their vulnerabilities [very unnatural nha!] with other members.
In conclusion, I believe that a shift towards smaller families will bring a great support to the development of the society, as the living standard and mental health of citizens will be enhanced in a positive way.
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- People attend colleges or universities for many different reasons (for example, new experiences, career preparation, increased knowledge etc.). Why do you think people attend colleges or universities? 78
- In many countries today, people in big cities either live alone or in small family units, rather than in large, extended family groups. Is this a positive or a negative trend? 84
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a change' or simply 'changes'?
Suggestion: a change; changes
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...ow living in a densely-populated area. The first advantage that needs to be tak...
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Message: Use only 'lower' (without 'more') when you use the comparative.
Suggestion: lower
...as the prices of these real estates are more lower economica l than those of big houses. F...
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...oth physical and mental nourishments. Another main cause of this trend is that...
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...ry unnatural nha!] with other members. In conclusion, I believe that a shift to...
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Message: Consider replacing "in a positive way" with adverb for "positive"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...tal health of citizens will be enhanced in a positive way.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, if, so, therefore, thus, well, whereas, for example, in conclusion, as a result, as well as, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 24.0651302605 129% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 49.0 41.998997996 117% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1835.0 1615.20841683 114% => OK
No of words: 366.0 315.596192385 116% => OK
Chars per words: 5.01366120219 5.12529762239 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37391431897 4.20363070211 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81728438105 2.80592935109 100% => OK
Unique words: 206.0 176.041082164 117% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.562841530055 0.561755894193 100% => OK
syllable_count: 582.3 506.74238477 115% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 30.0 20.2975951904 148% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 48.923622447 49.4020404114 99% => OK
Chars per sentence: 152.916666667 106.682146367 143% => OK
Words per sentence: 30.5 20.7667163134 147% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.4166666667 7.06120827912 162% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.01903807615 120% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.22178190946 0.244688304435 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.087558632499 0.084324248473 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0511658176865 0.0667982634062 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.140884314597 0.151304729494 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0436090725801 0.056905535591 77% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.4 13.0946893788 133% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.03 50.2224549098 82% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.0 11.3001002004 133% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.37 12.4159519038 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.22 8.58950901804 107% => OK
difficult_words: 95.0 78.4519038076 121% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 9.78957915832 138% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.0 10.1190380762 138% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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