Many manufactured food and drink products contain high levels of sugar, which causes many health problems. Sugary products should be made more expensive to encourage people to consume less sugar.
Do you agree or disagree?
In this day and age, with the alarming rate of obesity and other fatal ailments caused by consuming sugary products, myriad people believe that it is essential that those products’ price be increased, in order to lower the level of consumers. However, I completely disagree with this argument, considering its downsides and the fact that there are still far more effective solutions to this issue.
To begin with, it is crystal clear that sugary products, such as soft drinks or fast food, or even pastries are the main cause of people being overweight, which later leads to hazardous diseases. Evidently, it is high time that we did something about this matter. Nevertheless, raising their prices is not an ideal solution. there are two main reasons for my disagreement with this way of solving the mentioned problem. First, because of the fact that products which contain much sugar are one of the main dishes in every meal and often delicious, it would be unreasonable to make them become expensive food, especially for families who are on a tight budget. Furthermore, consuming sugar is not harmful until it reaches a certain amount. consumers can be advised to limit their usage, which will not affect their health.
In addition, there are more ways to solve this problem. one of these ways is to raise people’s awareness about the harm of eating too much sugar. For instance, students in Japan, from a very young age, are taught to eat healthily, with their school menus always full of nutritious dishes. Additionally, talks about the rebels on each product can be held, as most food consumers do not know about this information.
In conclusion, I opine that sugary products should not be made more expensive, as other steps could be made to improve global health. Instead of raising the price, we can educate children or give adults an idea about what the rebel says, in order to improve their activity in protecting their own wellbeing.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, furthermore, however, nevertheless, so, still, well, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, such as, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 13.1623246493 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 24.0651302605 141% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 45.0 41.998997996 107% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1633.0 1615.20841683 101% => OK
No of words: 329.0 315.596192385 104% => OK
Chars per words: 4.96352583587 5.12529762239 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.25891501996 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.57980055147 2.80592935109 92% => OK
Unique words: 199.0 176.041082164 113% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.604863221884 0.561755894193 108% => OK
syllable_count: 502.2 506.74238477 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 12.0 4.76152304609 252% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 60.0060737667 49.4020404114 121% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.866666667 106.682146367 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.9333333333 20.7667163134 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.26666666667 7.06120827912 117% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.9879759519 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.282107948664 0.244688304435 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.084997705005 0.084324248473 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0684562250956 0.0667982634062 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.159828430281 0.151304729494 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0417020685965 0.056905535591 73% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.9 13.0946893788 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 50.2224549098 117% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.3001002004 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.49 12.4159519038 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.71 8.58950901804 101% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 78.4519038076 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 18.0 9.78957915832 184% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.