Many manufactured food and drink products contain high levels of sugar which causes many health problems Sugary products should be made more expensive to encourage people to consume less sugar Do you agree or disagree

Essay topics:

Many manufactured food and drink products contain high levels of sugar which causes many health problems. Sugary products should be made more expensive to encourage people to consume less sugar.
Do you agree or disagree?

Nowadays, there is a tendency trying to consume less sugar among the people who prefer healthy lifestyle. It is believed that the majority items produced in the factories possess high amount of sugar and become a cause for several health issues. Should government increase the prices of sugary products to make people buy sugar in a decreased amount? I am opposite of it, because a human body naturally needs sugar and, at the same time it makes us feel good. Making sweet products expensive would be unfair to the individuals with an active lifestyle and normal people too.

A friend of my, who is involved in MMA (mixed martial arts), once recalled a story about his amateur period in sport. He explained, one could get unconscious if there is less sugar in blood. Once during the sparring session, he fell down while his eyes went black gradually. “My hands and foot were shaking”, he said. His trainer brought a sweet juice and soon after drinking it he recovered from a miserable condition. Moving or exercising every day will burn sugar in our organism. Instead making it expensive, people should be motivated to do sport.

On the other side, eating sweets help people feel good after fried food or any other meal. My mother eats candy or chocolate once she finishes her meal. She says it is good when you have eaten more oily food and makes her more active. These days many people would like to have a party for special events such birthday or to celebrate an achievement they accomplished. Obviously, people sometimes indulge themselves eating more and heavy while partying. Therefore, it is not appropriate to make expensive the items with high level of sugar.

To sum up, it is not a reasonable to make things, with high sugar level, because a human body requires sugar to function normally. Additionally, sweets make people feel happy and consequently they become more active in their life.

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Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 352, Rule ID: EN_GB_SIMPLE_REPLACE
Message: I is a common American expression, in British English it is more common to use: I
Suggestion: I
...people buy sugar in a decreased amount? I am opposite of it, because a human body...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, if, so, therefore, while, to sum up

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 32.0 24.0651302605 133% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 37.0 41.998997996 88% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1589.0 1615.20841683 98% => OK
No of words: 326.0 315.596192385 103% => OK
Chars per words: 4.87423312883 5.12529762239 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.24917287072 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.50503839463 2.80592935109 89% => OK
Unique words: 202.0 176.041082164 115% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.61963190184 0.561755894193 110% => OK
syllable_count: 506.7 506.74238477 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 5.43587174349 202% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 16.0721442886 124% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.2975951904 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 24.5773778097 49.4020404114 50% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 79.45 106.682146367 74% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.3 20.7667163134 78% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.45 7.06120827912 35% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 3.4128256513 234% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.286612910056 0.244688304435 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0778392690436 0.084324248473 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0595247213518 0.0667982634062 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.160172186437 0.151304729494 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0621741128682 0.056905535591 109% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.7 13.0946893788 74% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 50.2224549098 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 11.3001002004 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.67 12.4159519038 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.01 8.58950901804 93% => OK
difficult_words: 74.0 78.4519038076 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.1190380762 83% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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