Many people think that salary is the most important consideration when we choose a job To what extent do you agree or disagree

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Many people think that salary is the most important consideration when we choose a job. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Many people think that salary is the most important consideration when we choose a job. I totally agree with this idea due to the following reasons.
First of all, money is necessary for people to meet people’s basic needs such as housing and rental costs, food and grocery costs, utility bills, transportation costs,… If you live alone, you need to be able to afford housing costs otherwise you will not have a place to live and work. Housing and rental costs will vary significantly depending on where you live. If you live in the city, it will be more expensive than in the countryside. For food and groceries cost, everyone has to eat so it is the most necessary expense. If you don’t have money to buy food, you won’t have energy for working and you may even become ill. Besides, you need transportation to go to work, school or go out everyday so this is also one of the very important expenses that you need to pay.
Secondly, money can support them in further education. If you have money, you can choose to learn more skills. If you don’t know how to cook, you can enroll in cooking classes. If you like to decorate your house, you can learn arranging flower,… It can be beneficial in various aspects of your life. Moreover, you can learn skills in many fields such as marketing skills, computer skills, acting skills or singing, it will help you have more income.
Finally, money can bring people chances to travel. If you have a lot of money, you can travel to many places in the country or even in different countries. Traveling can help you relax recharge and help you get energy for working. However, the cost of traveling can be quiet expensive, so you need to be able to afford it.
In conclusion, I think salary is the most important consideration when we choose a job. If your family condition is not rich, choosing a job with a low salary will not be enough to pay for your life because the cost of living and the living needs of each person is increasing.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Line 2, column 218, Rule ID: AFFORD_VBG[1]
Message: This verb is used with infinitive: 'to house'.
Suggestion: to house
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Line 3, column 177, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...ook, you can enroll in cooking classes. If you like to decorate your house, you ca...
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Line 3, column 227, Rule ID: AFFORD_VBG[1]
Message: This verb is used with infinitive: 'to arrange'.
Suggestion: to arrange
...e to decorate your house, you can learn arranging flower,… It can be beneficial in variou...
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...ur house, you can learn arranging flower,… It can be beneficial in various aspects...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, finally, first, however, if, may, moreover, second, secondly, so, as to, i think, in conclusion, such as, first of all

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 20.0 7.85571142285 255% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 41.0 24.0651302605 170% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 39.0 41.998997996 93% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1633.0 1615.20841683 101% => OK
No of words: 359.0 315.596192385 114% => OK
Chars per words: 4.54874651811 5.12529762239 89% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.35284910392 4.20363070211 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.50431305235 2.80592935109 89% => OK
Unique words: 174.0 176.041082164 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.484679665738 0.561755894193 86% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 505.8 506.74238477 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.60771543086 87% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 5.43587174349 221% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 2.10420841683 333% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.76152304609 21% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 16.0721442886 118% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 56.2721916828 49.4020404114 114% => OK
Chars per sentence: 85.9473684211 106.682146367 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.8947368421 20.7667163134 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.0 7.06120827912 99% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 3.4128256513 205% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.278682720283 0.244688304435 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.122051981561 0.084324248473 145% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.174643335787 0.0667982634062 261% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.224155501341 0.151304729494 148% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.156916394147 0.056905535591 276% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.4 13.0946893788 72% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 70.13 50.2224549098 140% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.9 11.3001002004 70% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.11 12.4159519038 73% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.26 8.58950901804 85% => OK
difficult_words: 62.0 78.4519038076 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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