Men are more career-oriented than woman. Do you agree or disagree?
In this day and age people in the modern world are living in a fast paced lifestyle. Some says majority of the male population contributes on this phenomena while others believe that women has the greatest number. I will going to discuss to you my point of view on this essay.
Before, gender roles is very important in every society. This determines how they can function and do their assigned responsibilities. For example, women are only allowed to stay at home and look after their kids and do the household chores while men are the one whose going to find a job and find some ways for a living. This shows that men are basically take control and have a better opportunity on a growth of their chosen career.
On the other hand, today, men and women do get a chance of a fair play on their careers. Women today are empowered that they even get a chance to get a position to become a president of a certain country just like the Philippines. Businesses started to accept women in professions dominated by male population like doctors and law firms. This only shows that women get an equal opportunity just like men in our present times. People started to realized that they are career oriented as much as men does.
To conclude, men were basically born and raised to be career oriented because that's how they were brought up by the society during the old time. However, in this day and age women started to proved themselves that they do have the skills too and given the chance, they could probably much more dedicated on the field that they have chosen.
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Essay evaluation report
Some says majority of the male population contributes on this phenomena
Some say that the majority of the male population contributes on this phenomenon
Sentence: Some says majority of the male population contributes on this phenomena
Description: A determiner/pronoun, singular is not usually followed by a noun, plural, common
Suggestion: Refer to this and phenomena
women has the greatest number.
woman has the greatest number.
Sentence: I will going to discuss to you my point of view on this essay.
Description: A modal auxillary is not usually followed by a verb, present participle or gerund
Suggestion: Refer to will and going
gender roles is very important in every society.
gender roles are very important in every society.
while men are the one whose going to find a job
while men are the ones whose responsibilities are going to find a job
while men are the one who are going to find a job
men are basically take control
men are basically to take control
men are basically taking control
Sentence: People started to realized that they are career oriented as much as men does.
Description: The token to is not usually followed by a verb, past participle
Suggestion: Refer to to and realized
Sentence: However, in this day and age women started to proved themselves that they do have the skills too and given the chance, they could probably much more dedicated on the field that they have chosen.
Description: The token to is not usually followed by a verb, past participle
Suggestion: Refer to to and proved
flaws:
No. of Grammatical Errors: 9 2
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 5.5 out of 9
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 9 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 14 15
No. of Words: 281 350
No. of Characters: 1255 1500
No. of Different Words: 155 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.094 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.466 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.355 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 76 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 49 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 31 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 21 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 20.071 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.181 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.286 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.326 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.556 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.082 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 91, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'says'' or 'say's'?
Suggestion: says'; say's
... living in a fast paced lifestyle. Some says majority of the male population contrib...
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Line 1, column 222, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'will' requires the base form of the verb: 'go'
Suggestion: go
...t women has the greatest number. I will going to discuss to you my point of view on t...
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Line 3, column 1, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Before” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
... you my point of view on this essay. Before, gender roles is very important in ever...
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Line 3, column 357, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'taken'.
Suggestion: taken
...ving. This shows that men are basically take control and have a better opportunity o...
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Line 3, column 428, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to career'
Suggestion: to career
...opportunity on a growth of their chosen career. On the other hand, today, men and ...
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Line 7, column 79, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: that's
...nd raised to be career oriented because thats how they were brought up by the society...
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Discourse Markers used:
['but', 'however', 'if', 'look', 'so', 'while', 'for example', 'on the other hand']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.245033112583 0.247107183377 99% => OK
Verbs: 0.182119205298 0.155533422707 117% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0562913907285 0.0946595960268 59% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0496688741722 0.0501214627716 99% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0529801324503 0.0437548338989 121% => OK
Prepositions: 0.132450331126 0.122226691241 108% => OK
Participles: 0.0430463576159 0.0403226058552 107% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.4362751243 2.80594681477 87% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0364238410596 0.0326793684256 111% => OK
Particles: 0.00331125827815 0.00163938923432 202% => Less particles wanted.
Determiners: 0.112582781457 0.0861772015684 131% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.00993377483444 0.021408717616 46% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.00993377483444 0.011925033212 83% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 1565.0 1933.35771543 81% => OK
No of words: 281.0 316.048096192 89% => OK
Chars per words: 5.56939501779 6.12580529183 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.09427095027 4.20517956788 97% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.281138790036 0.374742101984 75% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.195729537367 0.28420135186 69% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.124555160142 0.203846283523 61% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.0782918149466 0.137316102897 57% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.4362751243 2.80594681477 87% => OK
Unique words: 153.0 176.037074148 87% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.544483985765 0.56093040696 97% => OK
Word variations: 55.0661362787 60.7387585426 91% => OK
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0891783567 87% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0714285714 20.7743622355 97% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.7301828808 49.517814964 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 111.785714286 127.492653851 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.0714285714 20.7743622355 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.571428571429 0.814263465372 70% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38877755511 91% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 3.99599198397 150% => OK
Readability: 39.6443823081 49.1944974215 81% => OK
Elegance: 1.47674418605 1.69124875643 87% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.125584090104 0.332605444948 38% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.112098308472 0.102741220458 109% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0715757803325 0.0668466124924 107% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.518223281801 0.534860350844 97% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.146471034058 0.148594505496 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0542122977191 0.134430193775 40% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0465884050284 0.0742795772207 63% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.304401705803 0.324371583561 94% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0249595777755 0.0638462369009 39% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0853337577507 0.228012699653 37% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0323238472882 0.058150111329 56% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.68436873747 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 3.41683366733 176% => OK
Positive topic words: 6.0 5.90881763527 102% => OK
Negative topic words: 0.0 2.5751503006 0% => More negative topic words wanted.
Neutral topic words: 2.0 1.9629258517 102% => OK
Total topic words: 8.0 10.4468937876 77% => OK
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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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