Most countries aim to improve their standard of living through economic development, but many important social values can be lost as a result. Do the advantages of economic development outweigh the disadvantages?
Nowadays, the majority of countries all around the world consider economic growth as the key driver of better living standards. Nevertheless, this trend would result in the loss of numerous essential social values. In my viewpoint, while economic development has both pros and cons, I do believe that its detrimental effects far outweigh the positive side.
Increasing economic progress increases personal prosperity, which creates a better quality of life for citizens. With greater financial resources at their disposal, individuals can not only fulfill their basic needs like groceries and shelter but also indulge in luxuries such as traveling to beautiful destinations and buying high-end products that they always dreamed of. However, this economic advancement also exerts a variety of adverse effects on both individuals and the family. When money plays the most important role in our lives, people tend to strive for financial success, hence easily entangled in a fiercely competitive market. For example, family is the most impacted when people have to work late hours at the office and have a hectic schedule because they will find it struggle to find quality time to reunite like having dinner together or hanging out for a picnic. As a result, the familial bonds will be strained and most affected in a negative direction and children may suffer from neglect, and lack of love and attention they require.
As economies grow and societies prosper, numerous detrimental impacts overshadow the benefits as people overly focus on acquiring material possessions. Consequently, there can be a shift away from ethical behavior as well as self-centered and more valuing personal gain. Additionally, this phenomenon can lead to environmental degradation as environmental resources are being exploited, while simultaneously widening the gap between the rich and the poor, exacerbating social tensions and disparities.
In conclusion, while improving the standard of living through economic development shows undeniable positive aspects, it seems to me that it exacts a heavy toll on society's foundational values and the disadvantages far outweigh the advantages.
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Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 788, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'struggles'?
Suggestion: struggles
...ctic schedule because they will find it struggle to find quality time to reunite like ha...
^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, hence, however, if, may, nevertheless, so, well, while, for example, in conclusion, such as, as a result, as well as, in my view
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 13.1623246493 38% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 10.4138276553 154% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 19.0 24.0651302605 79% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 41.998997996 88% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1837.0 1615.20841683 114% => OK
No of words: 331.0 315.596192385 105% => OK
Chars per words: 5.5498489426 5.12529762239 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.26537283232 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.9875961694 2.80592935109 106% => OK
Unique words: 217.0 176.041082164 123% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.655589123867 0.561755894193 117% => OK
syllable_count: 575.1 506.74238477 113% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 2.10420841683 285% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 56.5989733739 49.4020404114 115% => OK
Chars per sentence: 141.307692308 106.682146367 132% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.4615384615 20.7667163134 123% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.7692307692 7.06120827912 167% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.284419691197 0.244688304435 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0809973572601 0.084324248473 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0688846904553 0.0667982634062 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.169470196104 0.151304729494 112% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0805543662255 0.056905535591 142% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.4 13.0946893788 133% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 37.64 50.2224549098 75% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 11.3001002004 126% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.21 12.4159519038 123% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.03 8.58950901804 117% => OK
difficult_words: 108.0 78.4519038076 138% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 788, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'struggles'?
Suggestion: struggles
...ctic schedule because they will find it struggle to find quality time to reunite like ha...
^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, hence, however, if, may, nevertheless, so, well, while, for example, in conclusion, such as, as a result, as well as, in my view
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 13.1623246493 38% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 10.4138276553 154% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 19.0 24.0651302605 79% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 41.998997996 88% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1837.0 1615.20841683 114% => OK
No of words: 331.0 315.596192385 105% => OK
Chars per words: 5.5498489426 5.12529762239 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.26537283232 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.9875961694 2.80592935109 106% => OK
Unique words: 217.0 176.041082164 123% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.655589123867 0.561755894193 117% => OK
syllable_count: 575.1 506.74238477 113% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 2.10420841683 285% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 56.5989733739 49.4020404114 115% => OK
Chars per sentence: 141.307692308 106.682146367 132% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.4615384615 20.7667163134 123% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.7692307692 7.06120827912 167% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.284419691197 0.244688304435 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0809973572601 0.084324248473 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0688846904553 0.0667982634062 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.169470196104 0.151304729494 112% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0805543662255 0.056905535591 142% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.4 13.0946893788 133% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 37.64 50.2224549098 75% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 11.3001002004 126% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.21 12.4159519038 123% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.03 8.58950901804 117% => OK
difficult_words: 108.0 78.4519038076 138% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.