In most countries, prison is the most common solution for the problem of crime. However, the more effective solution is to provide people with better education so that they do not become criminals.
Prison has widely known as a strict and effective solution towards criminality, yet arguments regarding its benefits and morality seem to not be ceased. In fact, many believe that nourish individuals with education is a better option. I disagree with this notion.
It is clear that education has many positive impacts on humans’ lives. To begin with, it is a direct cure to the core of the criminal problem. Most criminals come from uneducated, neglected childhood that grown into misbehavior and mental issues. These children are unstable and unaware of the aftermath, they require specific help and guidance. Recent survey informed that 20% of children in Asian regions are not provided with accommodations and schools, which later drive them to do illegal actions to survive. Indeed, the educational value of this method can repair their loss of faith, mental damage and encourage people to become a better person in general. Thus, the humane atmosphere in schools can alternate one’s thoughts and make them feels like they are valuable and worthy.
However, many individuals are unwilling to accept and change. Prison is a stronger and more efficient method towards criminals. Firstly, this will keep them detained from causing significant harm to society. These individuals have nothing to lose and will commit crime again for their benefits. Many cases against the law are purposive and orchestrated, which will become an alarming risk if we ignore these consequences. For instance, the terrorist in New Zealand’s church is not an accident, but rather deliberate for the entertainment and immorality of that criminal. Secondly, the prison’s strict method will keep criminals from repeating illegal actions. These prisoners will not have their freedom, obliged to work. community services continuously and learn about a country’s legal law. The most important facet of prisons is criminals can soon be released after their change of heart. In Vietnam, a prisoner can reduce up to 7-year time of imprisonment if they adjust their actions and comprehend righteousness.
In conclusion, regarding that education is a morale option towards criminal problems, I strongly believe that imprisonment is a more powerful and effective way for society.
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- The restoration of old buildings in major cities in the world costs numerous governments' expenditures. This money should be used in new housing and road development. To what extent do you agree or disagree? 78
- Lectures were used in the past with many students. With modern technology available for education, there is no justification for this way of teaching. 80
- In many countries, people can eat a wide variety of food that are grown in other areas. As a result, they eat more food produced in other regions than local food. Do you think the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages? 67
- The young people in the workforce are changing their jobs or careers every few years What do you think are the reasons Do you think the advantages outweigh the disadvantages 55
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 733, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Community
...ot have their freedom, obliged to work. community services continuously and learn about a...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, however, if, regarding, second, secondly, so, thus, for instance, in conclusion, in fact, in general, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 10.4138276553 182% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 24.0651302605 129% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 43.0 41.998997996 102% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1929.0 1615.20841683 119% => OK
No of words: 353.0 315.596192385 112% => OK
Chars per words: 5.46458923513 5.12529762239 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.33454660006 4.20363070211 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.92893188588 2.80592935109 104% => OK
Unique words: 211.0 176.041082164 120% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.597733711048 0.561755894193 106% => OK
syllable_count: 601.2 506.74238477 119% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 5.43587174349 166% => OK
Article: 6.0 2.52805611222 237% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 16.0721442886 137% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.2975951904 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 38.2443211363 49.4020404114 77% => OK
Chars per sentence: 87.6818181818 106.682146367 82% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.0454545455 20.7667163134 77% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.18181818182 7.06120827912 88% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 13.0 3.9879759519 326% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.251905680119 0.244688304435 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0587068274666 0.084324248473 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0351470459357 0.0667982634062 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.137426241062 0.151304729494 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0232229151132 0.056905535591 41% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.3 13.0946893788 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 46.78 50.2224549098 93% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.09 12.4159519038 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.26 8.58950901804 108% => OK
difficult_words: 108.0 78.4519038076 138% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 9.78957915832 72% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.1190380762 83% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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