Nowadays technology is increasingly being used to monitor what people are saying and doing (for example, through cellphone tracking and security cameras). In many cases, the people who are being monitored are unaware that this is happening. Do you think the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?
More and more people are being monitored unnoticeably by high technology such as cameras and software nowadays. While the appliance of technology offers maximum security, I believe that overusing this tool to spy on individuals is unadvisable.
To begin with, putting technology into surveillance is somewhat beneficial. With the help of the advanced gadgets, the work of security guards and police officers will be much easier to handle. For instance, shopping malls’ staffs can sit in the office and still be able to observe customers’ behavior to take actions when someone tries to steal the merchandise. In addition, secret agents from governments around the world need tracking devices and spyware to trace or search for potential terrorists. Thus, using technology to monitor people who are suspected to commit severe crime could prevent disasters caused by human from happening.
However, there are setbacks when taking advantage of technology to record people’s actions and conversations. Firstly, people have the rights to maintain their own privacy if they do not show any sign of being a convict. Therefore, spying on ordinary individuals continuously using technology is considered inappropriate, invasive and against the law of privacy protection. Secondly, since these types of equipment are made and programmed by human, there will be occasions when these machines go malfunctioned. In these cases, private and national security staffs might misjudge people and make wrong decisions which could possibly damage individuals’ reputation.
In conclusion, while using high technology to observe people for security purposes offers several benefits in some aspects, I believe that overusing this tool may have more disadvantages.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 624, Rule ID: MAY_COULD_POSSIBLY[1]
Message: Use simply 'could'.
Suggestion: could
...e people and make wrong decisions which could possibly damage individuals' reputation. ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, still, therefore, thus, while, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, such as, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 11.0 24.0651302605 46% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 41.998997996 88% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1506.0 1615.20841683 93% => OK
No of words: 263.0 315.596192385 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.72623574144 5.12529762239 112% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.02706775958 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.09861437367 2.80592935109 110% => OK
Unique words: 173.0 176.041082164 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.657794676806 0.561755894193 117% => OK
syllable_count: 479.7 506.74238477 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.60771543086 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 5.43587174349 37% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 28.9823451667 49.4020404114 59% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 115.846153846 106.682146367 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.2307692308 20.7667163134 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.6153846154 7.06120827912 164% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.295265617766 0.244688304435 121% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0921339711558 0.084324248473 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0596531086703 0.0667982634062 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.169041080794 0.151304729494 112% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0186638183593 0.056905535591 33% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.7 13.0946893788 120% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 34.26 50.2224549098 68% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.5 11.3001002004 119% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.95 12.4159519038 128% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.73 8.58950901804 113% => OK
difficult_words: 85.0 78.4519038076 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 9.78957915832 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.