Nowadays, there are many television advertisements aimed at children. What are the effect of these advertisements on children? Should TV advertisement be controlled?
It is said that there are plenty of advertisements target interest at children. From my perspective, this phenomenon could bring negative effects on children, and government should implement a law that control advertisement companies.
There are several negative influences for kids if they exposed in many commercials ads. Children are easily been persuaded by ads that hock their curiosity, those advertisements always provide attracting contents that make children eager to have the product, regardless whether they really need them or not. For example, some children would ask their parents to buy the newest video games for them, although they have already the old one, because they have influenced by advertisements that tell them the newest one is the best.
Therefor, in my opinion, government should controlled the advertisements, especially those ads aim at kids. Firstly, children are too young to distinguish that there curiosity to the product is been controlled by marketing strategies, they would think that owing the newest products is common in every families. By controlling the ads that influence kids, we could avoid commercials companies convey the error value to children. Secondly,by stopping the ads that make kids to ask their parents to buy products for them , could also benefits the parents. This could release the parent's stress, since they do not have to explain to their kids why they could not buy new toys for them, if there children do not exposed in commercial ads.
In conclusion, there are many negative effects that exposed kids in TV advertisements, by controlling the ads that aimed at children could avoid children form an error value and release the stress of parents.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, if, really, second, secondly, so, for example, in conclusion, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 10.4138276553 29% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 24.0651302605 145% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 29.0 41.998997996 69% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1446.0 1615.20841683 90% => OK
No of words: 273.0 315.596192385 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.2967032967 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.06481385082 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.87517127061 2.80592935109 102% => OK
Unique words: 142.0 176.041082164 81% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.520146520147 0.561755894193 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 426.6 506.74238477 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.5899279042 49.4020404114 104% => OK
Chars per sentence: 131.454545455 106.682146367 123% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.8181818182 20.7667163134 120% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.81818181818 7.06120827912 125% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.67935871743 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.281189600302 0.244688304435 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.129840918425 0.084324248473 154% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0970709662083 0.0667982634062 145% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.221580782127 0.151304729494 146% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0997907950411 0.056905535591 175% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.9 13.0946893788 121% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 50.2224549098 94% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.76 12.4159519038 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.3 8.58950901804 97% => OK
difficult_words: 60.0 78.4519038076 76% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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