There are growing concerns among publics today that the more time consumed in shopping malls by youngsters, the more negative affects will be predicted on both the young people and the whole society regard. In my opinion, this phenomenon will not only bring us some negative impacts but some positive effects also will be expected.
What are the problems that much expenditure of time in malls will lead to, it can be delve into two regards-- personal and social, respectively. For personal prospective, the time they spend in the malls will directly affect the consumption of them. That is to say, there is a highly possibility that youngsters will buy some impractical products which they are not intend to buy at first. Since the package and the advertising presented in a mall are much attractive and young people are not matured enough to resist it. As a result it will stimulate their greed for consumption and will eventually cause a short of money. For social regards, the consumption of products will produce enormous amount of rubbishes and it can give damages on natural environment. The food package, for example, the papers and plastic bags, people usually buy some food or drink with them while go around shops in shopping malls.
Under the shadow of this problem, it seems could bring some benefits to society as well as youngsters. Responding to the increasing development on electric device such as mobile phone and lat top, young people spending much less time with their friends and family than the past. Therefore, go shopping with friends and family in a mall becomes a modern style event to concrete a relationship among them. Furthermore, the production companies and government will also make profits by such activities. The companies including malls could offer more employment opportunities and government could receive adequate income of tax.
In conclusion, there may have much concerns on the way young people spending time in shopping malls and the influence on society. At the same time, the fact that both society and young people are receiving the benefits from it also cannot to be denied.
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- some people say that all young people should have full-time education until they are 18 years old. To what extent do you agree or disagree? 56
- some people say that all young people should have full time education until they are 18 years old To what extent do you agree or disagree 70
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 277, Rule ID: A_RB_NN[1]
Message: You used an adverb ('highly') instead an adjective, or a noun ('possibility') instead of another adjective.
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Line 3, column 368, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'intended'.
Suggestion: intended
...impractical products which they are not intend to buy at first. Since the package and ...
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Line 7, column 31, Rule ID: MUCH_COUNTABLE[1]
Message: Use 'many' with countable nouns.
Suggestion: many
...f tax. In conclusion, there may have much concerns on the way young people spendi...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, may, so, therefore, well, while, for example, in conclusion, such as, as a result, as well as, in my opinion, that is to say
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 7.85571142285 216% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 16.0 10.4138276553 154% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 24.0651302605 91% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 41.998997996 105% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1792.0 1615.20841683 111% => OK
No of words: 353.0 315.596192385 112% => OK
Chars per words: 5.07648725212 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.33454660006 4.20363070211 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65642334688 2.80592935109 95% => OK
Unique words: 187.0 176.041082164 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.529745042493 0.561755894193 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 547.2 506.74238477 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Interrogative: 1.0 0.384769539078 260% => OK
Article: 8.0 2.52805611222 316% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 27.5135619968 49.4020404114 56% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 112.0 106.682146367 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.0625 20.7667163134 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.6875 7.06120827912 137% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.294886967574 0.244688304435 121% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0982514366669 0.084324248473 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0885987382095 0.0667982634062 133% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.206171277046 0.151304729494 136% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0780745417963 0.056905535591 137% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.5 13.0946893788 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 50.2224549098 98% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.18 12.4159519038 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.49 8.58950901804 99% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 78.4519038076 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 9.78957915832 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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