Our personalities are predetermined as a result of our genes before we are born and there is nothing that can be done to alter our character traits. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. You should write at least 250 words.
There is an opinion that our characteristics are inborn, and nothing could be done to change them. However, in this essay, I will challenge this school of thought.
Granted, one might argue that one’s personalities are decided by genetical factors prior to his or her birth. This is predicated on the assumption that a lot of character traits can be seen in newly-born infants, who certainly haven’t had much exposure to the outside environment. To illustrate, it is not uncommon to see that many babies, who are just one or two months old, throw tantrums at even the most trivial things, for instance, having to lie on the bed instead of being pampered in their mother’s hands. Such kids, when growing up later, have a tendency to lose their tempers very easily, and will react very intensely to something they object to. This clearly renders that our characteristics are predetermined as a result of genes before we are born.
While the aforementioned claims seem to be true to a certain extent, they do not really stand up to scrutiny. In fact, a lot of our personality traits are altered through time, either in a more positive or negative way, due to outside factors. This can be seen in many cases of children born in less priviledged conditions. Being born, most kids may be pretty care-free. However, having to undergo extreme emotional pains, such as the death of one parent or domestic violence, they are likely to be more pessimistic and have a grimmer outlook on life. Similarly, a four-or-five-year-old child who is initially very shy, can still develop into a confident public speaker if given plenty of opportunities to express their ideas and communicate with others.
To conclude, while acknowledge that several of our traits are innate, I still believe that many of them can be shaped in a different way by the environment, or proper training and practice.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 119, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a different way" with adverb for "different"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...believe that many of them can be shaped in a different way by the environment, or proper training ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, look, may, really, similarly, so, still, while, for instance, in fact, such as, as a result, in many cases
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 13.1623246493 160% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 24.0651302605 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 49.0 41.998997996 117% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1571.0 1615.20841683 97% => OK
No of words: 319.0 315.596192385 101% => OK
Chars per words: 4.92476489028 5.12529762239 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.22617688928 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.96581214941 2.80592935109 106% => OK
Unique words: 198.0 176.041082164 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.620689655172 0.561755894193 110% => OK
syllable_count: 491.4 506.74238477 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.6521296913 49.4020404114 109% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.214285714 106.682146367 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.7857142857 20.7667163134 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.5 7.06120827912 120% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.271859373645 0.244688304435 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0953540589587 0.084324248473 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.087735013748 0.0667982634062 131% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.161392813925 0.151304729494 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0202995753855 0.056905535591 36% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.1 13.0946893788 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 50.2224549098 115% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.55 12.4159519038 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.59 8.58950901804 100% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 78.4519038076 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.