People are living longer after they retire. What are the problems? What can be done to solve these problems?
Retirement is regarded as enjoyment after a half of life spent in hard work, but there are also some major drawbacks for families and society. In my opinion, governments could much more to address these problems.
Families and society are the two that have been effected the most directly from pensioners. In regard to families, taking care of the old is an exhausting work that not anyone can be responsible for, especially in the case that these elders suffer from serious diseases such as kidney disease and Alzheimer’s disease. To be more specific, family members must endure the pressure not only physically, but also mentally with the pessimism and despair of gradual deterioration in patients’ health; some of them might be depressive and become psychotic. In terms of society, pension and social insurance for the retirees are the main factors causing burden to the social organization. The longer people can live after retirements due to medical advances, the more economic challenges administrations have.
However, there are various steps that governments should take to tackle these problems. Firstly, they could invest money in extracurricular activity as well as travelling program in order to ensure the physical and mental health for the old because prevention is always better and cheaper than cure. If retirees have serious illness, public affairs can encourage family members by monthly payment. Secondly, raising retirement age and reducing workload can also be considered. As the results, employees can continue contribute to the society with the suitable amount of work in order to ensure the national financial savings as well as old people’s health.
In conclusion, based on the points above, administrations could certainly implement a range of measures to minimize the negative influences from retirement regime.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, however, if, second, secondly, so, well, in conclusion, in fact, such as, as well as, in my opinion, in regard to
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 10.0 24.0651302605 42% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 41.998997996 86% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1562.0 1615.20841683 97% => OK
No of words: 288.0 315.596192385 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.42361111111 5.12529762239 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.11953428781 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.89927852615 2.80592935109 103% => OK
Unique words: 179.0 176.041082164 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.621527777778 0.561755894193 111% => OK
syllable_count: 493.2 506.74238477 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 5.43587174349 18% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 55.4081146728 49.4020404114 112% => OK
Chars per sentence: 120.153846154 106.682146367 113% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.1538461538 20.7667163134 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.7692307692 7.06120827912 153% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.16851538426 0.244688304435 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0581959585488 0.084324248473 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0578691445441 0.0667982634062 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.089512087895 0.151304729494 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0419149076335 0.056905535591 74% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.2 13.0946893788 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.69 50.2224549098 81% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 11.3001002004 116% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.16 12.4159519038 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.05 8.58950901804 117% => OK
difficult_words: 97.0 78.4519038076 124% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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