People live longer today and so people should stay in the workforce longer. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Nowadays, the average life expectancy is growing, thus it is believed that the retirement age ought to be raised. In my opinion, this is a reasonable suggestion as, in the long run, it benefits both individuals and society. Firstly, this essay will discuss a substantial contribution to national prosperity as a result of this policy, and secondly, improved personal wellness will be analysed.
The primary reason to remain employed longer is that it increases tax revenue, therefore, this is the key to success in terms of social well-being. At present, the amount of the economically active population is rapidly decreasing, frequently resulting in national budget deficits. Not only do elder taxpayers compensate for shortages caused by demographic disproportion, but they also ensure well a balanced economy in the long run. For instance, it has been revealed that the elderly’s payments make up the largest proportion of GDP, while only a tiny percentage is provided by those taking the first steps in their career.
Another point to consider implementing a higher retirement age is it strongly beneficial for maintaining both the physical and psychological health of aging employees. On no account should favourable consequences of staying professionally active till an old age be ignored. A prime example is Japan, the country with the highest life expectancy rate, where citizens stay capable of working longer than in any other region. Therefore, without being employed, senior citizens are far more likely to degrade their health and mental ability.
In conclusion, I am convinced that raising the retirement age is a must for any country that aims to ensure financial prosperity and longevity of its citizens. It is high time our society adapted changes required by a rapidly increasing human's lifespan.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 437, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... a balanced economy in the long run. For instance, it has been revealed that the ...
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Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'humans'' or 'human's'?
Suggestion: humans'; human's
...hanges required by a rapidly increasing humans lifespan.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, if, second, secondly, so, therefore, thus, well, while, in conclusion, as a result, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 13.1623246493 137% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 24.0651302605 96% => OK
Preposition: 32.0 41.998997996 76% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1537.0 1615.20841683 95% => OK
No of words: 287.0 315.596192385 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.35540069686 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.11595363751 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.03436112294 2.80592935109 108% => OK
Unique words: 189.0 176.041082164 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.658536585366 0.561755894193 117% => OK
syllable_count: 493.2 506.74238477 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 28.9629430653 49.4020404114 59% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 118.230769231 106.682146367 111% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.0769230769 20.7667163134 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.53846153846 7.06120827912 135% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0560964152402 0.244688304435 23% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0182917819477 0.084324248473 22% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0297637751858 0.0667982634062 45% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0280991085137 0.151304729494 19% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0299342445338 0.056905535591 53% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.9 13.0946893788 114% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.69 50.2224549098 81% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 11.3001002004 116% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.81 12.4159519038 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.45 8.58950901804 122% => OK
difficult_words: 104.0 78.4519038076 133% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 11.2359550562 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 9
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