People should look after their health for personal benefits, rather than a duty for a society. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Health plays an important role in people society. However, there are several concerns given by some individuals that they should take care of their health for personal benefits than an obligations of a society. In my opinion, I agree with this point of view for many reasons.
First, having a healthy life is beneficial for themselves. it is scientifically proven that a good health may help people prevent all the illness and aged-related diseases such as diabetes, cardiovascular, etc which could decrease the support to the development of physical and mental health. They may always be worried about their bad health and take a number of medicines in order to save their lives to live longer. Moreover, human could limit the amount of money they have to pay for their health services. For example, if they are in an unhealthy mode like catching a disease, they might have to go to the hospitals to be checked for several days, which is not an affordable idea since this place is costly for some people.
On the other hands, governments and healthcare services also decide a vital role in keeping people healthy enough. They should spend more public money on this field by providing free vaccines or giving more discounts in health insurance, which partly help the citizens in improving their health. Furthermore, there is a fact that not all people have an awareness of their health because of the lack of communication with the governments or poverty. This part of the society has no choice to give up their health so as to have more money for their families. Thus, increasing more welfare for this type of people is necessary so that to ensure the stability and sustainability of the society. The leaders of nations, otherwise, might have a responsibility in decreasing the damage of the environment as it could improve the quality of the residents' health and prevent some problems related to environmental pollution.
In conclusion, both individuals and the governments share the same roles in looking after people health because this not only improve the quality of their life but also for the personal benefits.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 183, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'an obligation' or simply 'obligations'?
Suggestion: an obligation; obligations
...their health for personal benefits than an obligations of a society. In my opinion, I agree wi...
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Line 2, column 59, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: It
...lthy life is beneficial for themselves. it is scientifically proven that a good he...
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Line 2, column 536, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in an unhealthy mode" with adverb for "unhealthy"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...alth services. For example, if they are in an unhealthy mode like catching a disease, they might hav...
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Line 3, column 513, Rule ID: SO_AS_TO[1]
Message: Use simply 'to'
Suggestion: to
...y has no choice to give up their health so as to have more money for their families. Thu...
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Line 3, column 715, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... of the society. The leaders of nations, otherwise, might have a responsibility i...
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Line 3, column 839, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'residents'' or 'resident's'?
Suggestion: residents'; resident's
... as it could improve the quality of the residents health and prevent some problems relate...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, however, if, look, may, moreover, so, thus, as to, for example, in conclusion, such as, in my opinion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 24.0651302605 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 48.0 41.998997996 114% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1767.0 1615.20841683 109% => OK
No of words: 356.0 315.596192385 113% => OK
Chars per words: 4.96348314607 5.12529762239 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34372677135 4.20363070211 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77831993685 2.80592935109 99% => OK
Unique words: 186.0 176.041082164 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.522471910112 0.561755894193 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 557.1 506.74238477 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 58.9872302565 49.4020404114 119% => OK
Chars per sentence: 117.8 106.682146367 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.7333333333 20.7667163134 114% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.0666666667 7.06120827912 143% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.01903807615 120% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.306630238732 0.244688304435 125% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.112016009664 0.084324248473 133% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0620683221114 0.0667982634062 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.21464052526 0.151304729494 142% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0381603120543 0.056905535591 67% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.8 13.0946893788 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 50.2224549098 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.78 12.4159519038 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.37 8.58950901804 97% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 78.4519038076 103% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.