The percentage of overweight children in western society has increased by almost 20% in the last ten years.
Discuss the causes and effects of this disturbing trend.
Obese children in advanced world have risen by almost twenty percent in the last decade. It is increasingly perceived as a threat to society and considered as a trigger for different problems. The objective of this essay is to evaluate the forces behind this trend and its consequences.
Firstly, diet and lifestyle are supposed to be the two most major catalysts of obesity. In one hand, many advertisements encourage children to consume unhealthy fast food that includes fats, salt and sugar contents. In the other hand, lots of children live sedentary lifestyle; child prefers to stay at home to play computer games instead of outdoor activities.
Overweight children are more likely to have high blood pressure and high cholesterol, which are risk factors for cardiovascular disease. In addition, increased risk of insulin resistance, diabetes and breathing problems, such as asthma and sleep apnea. Regarding future of obese children, they are more likely to become adults with obesity and possibility of cancer. Moreover, in school, an obese student affected by colleagues’ bullying, then that results in psychological problems such as stress and depression. Therefore, this result in low productivity in the school curriculum. Furthermore, they are less likely to be selected for school sports which leads to more obesity and less fitness.
To conclude, it can be difficult to make healthy food choices and get enough physical activity in environments that do not support the affordability of healthy food options such as restaurants and homes. Also places provide opportunities for physical activity such as childcare centers and schools.
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also, first, firstly, furthermore, if, moreover, regarding, so, then, therefore, in addition, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 7.85571142285 13% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 11.0 24.0651302605 46% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 41.998997996 86% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.3376753507 24% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1399.0 1615.20841683 87% => OK
No of words: 257.0 315.596192385 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.44357976654 5.12529762239 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.00390054096 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.99540140213 2.80592935109 107% => OK
Unique words: 164.0 176.041082164 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.63813229572 0.561755894193 114% => OK
syllable_count: 439.2 506.74238477 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 32.8279373307 49.4020404114 66% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.9285714286 106.682146367 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.3571428571 20.7667163134 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.21428571429 7.06120827912 102% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.123700589062 0.244688304435 51% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0413873519612 0.084324248473 49% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0424797883838 0.0667982634062 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0769180259397 0.151304729494 51% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0805354827569 0.056905535591 142% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.4 13.0946893788 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.75 50.2224549098 89% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.27 12.4159519038 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.06 8.58950901804 117% => OK
difficult_words: 90.0 78.4519038076 115% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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