Scientists agree that people are damaging their health by eating too much junk food Some people think that the answer to this problem is to educate people Others think education will not work Discuss both views and give your opinion

Scientists claim that consuming fast food is damaging for people's health, it is considered that the key to solving the issue is to teaching people, while there are some who suggest that a studying will not aid. Notwithstanding, from my perspective, I contend that education is an effective method to decrease this consumption, but does not prevent eating junk food at all.
Firstly, it seems undeniable that the modern world has become more demanding, giving rise to pressure, stress and requires that a person makes more efforts to achieve the desirable working outcome, thus the person eating fast food for the sake of time-saving . In addition, numerous organizations in the neighborhood possess some indispensible fast food shops feeding organization’s staff. As a result, consuming unhealthy food becomes habit and convenient way to meet the eating needs. Secondly, nowadays fast food is not pricy , and affordable for poverty population , these opt to this type food only because their financial circumstance do not allow them to purchase nutrition food. They would be happy to choose organic food, if their well-being could be improved. Therefore, most feel that high workloads do not allow them to take enough time to care about themselves and they found this way feeding due to convenience and a great number of people consume unhealthy food due to their financial burden.
Nevertheless, it is worth remarking that compared to the past, people’s health has deteriorated last decades and one of the reason is the consumption fast food. I would endorse that education is one of the effective measure to improve the unhealthy problem, the majority of people pay more attention their health , probably, awareness of life-threatening act as a deterrent to people’s opting for unhealthy food. For instance, people should know how many disease are caused by fast food eating and about consequences of treatments. Additionally, high taxes should be imposed on a production and a distributing fast food, increasing the price of production . Furthermore, prohibiting any advertisement of fast food would encourage to refuse of choosing this type of food, instill positive habits. As a result, education and imposing a big taxes on fast food deter people of opting useful way of eating.
In conclusion, it is considered that fast food is convenient , time-saving way to feeding , however , education and making a big price of fast food production would decrease the consumption.

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Average: 7 (15 votes)

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, furthermore, however, if, nevertheless, second, secondly, so, still, therefore, thus, well, while, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, as a result

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 13.1623246493 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 24.0651302605 129% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 43.0 41.998997996 102% => OK
Nominalization: 19.0 8.3376753507 228% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2095.0 1615.20841683 130% => OK
No of words: 394.0 315.596192385 125% => OK
Chars per words: 5.31725888325 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.45527027702 4.20363070211 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.12359470642 2.80592935109 111% => OK
Unique words: 212.0 176.041082164 120% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.53807106599 0.561755894193 96% => OK
syllable_count: 639.0 506.74238477 126% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 20.2975951904 128% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 56.2291344016 49.4020404114 114% => OK
Chars per sentence: 139.666666667 106.682146367 131% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.2666666667 20.7667163134 126% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.5333333333 7.06120827912 163% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 46.0 5.01903807615 917% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.241164605693 0.244688304435 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0900255205612 0.084324248473 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0476342819287 0.0667982634062 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.161879740422 0.151304729494 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0643901197297 0.056905535591 113% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.8 13.0946893788 128% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.09 50.2224549098 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 11.3001002004 119% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.87 12.4159519038 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.01 8.58950901804 105% => OK
difficult_words: 102.0 78.4519038076 130% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 18.5 9.78957915832 189% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.1190380762 123% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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