scientists agree that people ruin their health by eating junk food some people think that is the best way to prevent people from eating junk food is to educate them, while others believe that this won't work. discuss both views and give your own opinion.
It is an obvious fact that junk foods endanger our health conditions and eating it frequently will have many disruptive effects on our body in a hardly far future. But despite of the knowledge that some people have upon the benefits of healthy and home made food due to time and cost of these kinds of nutrients they are most likely to use junk food.
Tv,internet and social media have always had an special place in our life styles. some people might simply deny this but advertisement impacts their unconscious parts of brains say when we go for shopping and we want to shop on topics that we’ve never had experience buying before we’d rather buy the one that we’ve already heard the name than the one with unfamiliar name and look. this fact implies in our life styles too. if instead of seeing commercial of diverse fast foods we repeatedly see advertisements that would strongly encourage eating and using healthy food after a while we’ll prefer healthy food style. due to the research done by the scientists people in groups accommodate to the decision that is made by group even if they disagree with it or they are not satisfied with the results they will still conform with the unity of the group. So if we think of society as a big group and consider the decision is alternating healthy foods with junk food after a while we will get to see that the most of the people are behaving as it is beneficial to their health and body.
In the other hand some think spending a huge amount of resource on conducting and educating advertisements is useless and that money can be invested in other parts of a society for instance on making new jobs or supporting new and young working resources. We can’t claim that this isn’t a logical idea but if we change our point of view my can see that instead of spending that much time, money and years of people’s life for training that many doctors we can simply confront the possible sicknesses in future.
At last my personal opinion is that eating junk food has became more like a habit than a thinking style and habits can be changed. in addition to my personal experience most of the people don’t even know what harms eating junk food can cause on their bodies and they like it just because it is easy to find, gets ready fast enough and more importantly they are so tired to cook! But if enough notice were put upon this issue it might be leaded throw the right pass and all the obesities and health problems that have been stablished get solved.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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...r shopping and we want to shop on topics that we've never had experience buy...
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Message: The adverb 'never' is usually put between 'had' and 'experience'.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, look, so, still, while, for instance, in addition
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 13.1623246493 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 7.85571142285 153% => OK
Conjunction : 24.0 10.4138276553 230% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 15.0 7.30460921844 205% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 55.0 24.0651302605 229% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 54.0 41.998997996 129% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2088.0 1615.20841683 129% => OK
No of words: 453.0 315.596192385 144% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.60927152318 5.12529762239 90% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.61343653406 4.20363070211 110% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.45014218789 2.80592935109 87% => OK
Unique words: 230.0 176.041082164 131% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.507726269316 0.561755894193 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 645.3 506.74238477 127% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.60771543086 87% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 37.0 20.2975951904 182% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 98.1505009327 49.4020404114 199% => OK
Chars per sentence: 174.0 106.682146367 163% => OK
Words per sentence: 37.75 20.7667163134 182% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.83333333333 7.06120827912 68% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 13.0 5.01903807615 259% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.27943950913 0.244688304435 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.105414030601 0.084324248473 125% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0589865700307 0.0667982634062 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.174781095803 0.151304729494 116% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0333205642064 0.056905535591 59% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 19.2 13.0946893788 147% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.84 50.2224549098 101% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.4 11.3001002004 136% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.05 12.4159519038 81% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.47 8.58950901804 99% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 78.4519038076 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 9.78957915832 133% => OK
gunning_fog: 16.8 10.1190380762 166% => OK
text_standard: 17.0 10.7795591182 158% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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