Shopping is now one of the most popular forms of leisure activity in many countries for young adults.
Why is this?
Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?
shopping has been a recent favorite activity to spend on free time by an adolescent in some states. This happens likely because of lack of public open space. Firstly, the essay will discuss the ground reason on developing shopping as the main choice of leisure activity and secondly, the essay will elaborate on the negative development that comes along with choose shopping on free time.
Limited option on communal space for young people to spend their spare time has lead to force them to choose shopping. A decade ago, young adults had many options of place and recreation such as fish pond to fishing, open park with many facilities and unrestricted forest. Nowadays those open space removed as a compensating of urban lifestyle and state's massive expansion, consequently. This happens in many developing countries such as Indonesia, Thailand, and Malaysia. For example at Indonesia. a lot of public garden and park has been replaced by skyscrapers and commercial buildings.
The habit to buy something whether in a retail or in a bulk could bring detrimental effect, especially at young people. That is to say, consumptive behavior troubled them to manage their money and set priority upon what is they need as opposed to what is they want. A research conducted by Harvard psychologist showed that young people who suffered from consumptive behavior tend to have a bad money management characteristic and poor financial position. This is supported by the high number of young adult who doesn't have any savings despite the fact that they already have a job.
In conclusion. the idea that shopping as a way to spend a spate time has grown stronger because of a narrow choice of leisure spot and consequently brings drawback on financial habit in the adolescent.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Shopping
shopping has been a recent favorite activity to ...
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Line 1, column 367, Rule ID: AFFORD_VBG[1]
Message: This verb is used with infinitive: 'to shop'.
Suggestion: to shop
...evelopment that comes along with choose shopping on free time. Limited option on comm...
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Message: This verb is used with infinitive: 'to shop'.
Suggestion: to shop
...e time has lead to force them to choose shopping. A decade ago, young adults had many op...
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: A
...and Malaysia. For example at Indonesia. a lot of public garden and park has been ...
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...d by the high number of young adult who doesnt have any savings despite the fact that ...
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Suggestion: The
...y already have a job. In conclusion. the idea that shopping as a way to spend a ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, first, firstly, if, second, secondly, so, for example, in conclusion, such as, that is to say
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 13.1623246493 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 16.0 24.0651302605 66% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 41.998997996 102% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1482.0 1615.20841683 92% => OK
No of words: 293.0 315.596192385 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.05802047782 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.13729897018 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76676686647 2.80592935109 99% => OK
Unique words: 169.0 176.041082164 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.576791808874 0.561755894193 103% => OK
syllable_count: 465.3 506.74238477 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 7.0 2.52805611222 277% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.76152304609 21% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 57.4791169808 49.4020404114 116% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.857142857 106.682146367 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.9285714286 20.7667163134 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.64285714286 7.06120827912 108% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.01903807615 120% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.67935871743 35% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 3.4128256513 205% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.196187372736 0.244688304435 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0572460036437 0.084324248473 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.056337257674 0.0667982634062 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.104018877658 0.151304729494 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0532693507595 0.056905535591 94% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.9 13.0946893788 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 50.2224549098 102% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.07 12.4159519038 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.78 8.58950901804 102% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 78.4519038076 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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