Shopping is now one of the most popular forms of leisure activity in many countries for young adults. What do you think is the reason for this? Is this a positive or negative development?

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Shopping is now one of the most popular forms of leisure activity in many countries for young adults. What do you think is the reason for this? Is this a positive or negative development?

In many countries, there is a tendency that youngsters spare their free time doing shopping. There are several reasons and effects which will be discussed in the essay.

First and foremost, because all types of advertisement are developing, ads may play an essential role in this upward trend.For example,it is undeniable that today, young people spend lots of time on internet web sites which are full of banner ads that advert all types of goods. That is why, they start to be interested in the products adverted on the internet, and looking for them while doing shopping.Needless to say, technological development can also be considered as a crucial way, since modern gadgets are mostly used by youngsters. What is more, one of the companies' tricks is giving different kinds of offers and discounts on their products to attract numerous consumers. Because of the reasons noted before, young people are more likely to take advantages of them.

Turning to the result, what this trend has affected positively is the rate of unemployement. That is because, as the influx of costumers happens in the shopping centers, companies have to meet the large demands due to the increased sales, which in turn lead them to open new factories.Hence, by applying these workplaces, the noticeable part of society get the chance of new work, and no longer suffer from being out of a job.Regarding the negative sides, majority of youngsters have been wasting money, as they have become addicted to shopping.Because of their age, they are not interested in controlling their budget, and spend their money on unnecessary goods.

In summary,yougsters are affected by advertisement, mostly because of the reason that they spend their most of time on the internet, and therefore shopping has become addictive to them.Thus, they purchase lots of products, most of which are not needed.However, having said that, this tendency is beneficial for increasing the number of the employed.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, hence, however, if, look, may, regarding, so, therefore, thus, while, for example, in summary, what is more

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 13.1623246493 160% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 7.85571142285 38% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 24.0651302605 112% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 41.998997996 119% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1653.0 1615.20841683 102% => OK
No of words: 319.0 315.596192385 101% => OK
Chars per words: 5.18181818182 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.22617688928 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.05227754754 2.80592935109 109% => OK
Unique words: 181.0 176.041082164 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.567398119122 0.561755894193 101% => OK
syllable_count: 502.2 506.74238477 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 2.10420841683 285% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 4.0 0.809619238477 494% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 16.0721442886 56% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 35.0 20.2975951904 172% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 156.460936631 49.4020404114 317% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 183.666666667 106.682146367 172% => OK
Words per sentence: 35.4444444444 20.7667163134 171% => OK
Discourse Markers: 13.3333333333 7.06120827912 189% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.01903807615 179% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.186463680428 0.244688304435 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0790318391347 0.084324248473 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0435408955671 0.0667982634062 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.109800050007 0.151304729494 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0414899410386 0.056905535591 73% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 20.7 13.0946893788 158% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 35.95 50.2224549098 72% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 16.9 11.3001002004 150% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.36 12.4159519038 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.58 8.58950901804 112% => OK
difficult_words: 85.0 78.4519038076 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 9.78957915832 148% => OK
gunning_fog: 16.0 10.1190380762 158% => OK
text_standard: 21.0 10.7795591182 195% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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