In some countries, a lot of children have health issues and are becoming overweight. Some people think that the government should be responsible for solving this problem. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Nowadays, obesity incidence is accelerating due to the advancement of convenience products and electronic devices. Therefore, inhabitants are urging government intervention to salvage the situation. From my perspective, while states can play a significant role, the responsibilities of parents and educators should be emphasized.
On the one hand, the development of children is crucial to the national prospect when human resources are abundant. Therefore, the authority can organize several campaigns that incentivize children to exercise. For example, in Viet Nam, the government promotes sports classes and hiking holidays, which offers a valuable opportunity for juniors to participate in physical training. Moreover, local councils can also expand the playgrounds for children by opening parks or squares. Contemporarily, the ubiquity of infrastructure and transportation networks has occupied spaces within the urban expanse, preventing children from enjoying outdoor activities with their fellow beings. Nevertheless, with the revitalization of commodious and vehicle-free areas, the youths can be encouraged to adopt physical discipline in their routine.
On the other hand, the health deficits of children are to blame for the deficiency of attention from guardians. Under the socio-economics, it is commonplace for parents to devote their available time to work, depriving them of the opportunities to allocate attention to their offspring. As a repercussion, dietary patterns are not regulated and usually include unhealthy food, which can underlie several illnesses such as hypertension, diabetes, and blood pressure. Furthermore, the freedom to passively observe the TV or computer’s screen can result in insufficient motor movements and sedentary lifestyles. Otherwise, if parents dedicate themselves to educating and monitoring, children can have a better understanding of the significance of fitness and overcome their unhealthy habits. Secondly, the curriculums accentuate the importance of academic subjects like Maths, Literature, and Chemistry but neglect the contribution of Physical Education. For instance, in England where plenty of children suffer from the overweight condition, an average student merely participates in physical activities for two hours per week. Therefore, the educators must deliver the knowledge about maintaining longevity to their pupils while simultaneously introducing an optimal timetable with a longer workout duration.
In conclusion, a combination of the endeavors of the governments and responsible adults can generate positive effects on the children’s well-being and progression.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, if, moreover, nevertheless, second, secondly, so, therefore, well, while, for example, for instance, in conclusion, such as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 10.4138276553 154% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 11.0 24.0651302605 46% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 41.998997996 121% => OK
Nominalization: 20.0 8.3376753507 240% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2283.0 1615.20841683 141% => OK
No of words: 370.0 315.596192385 117% => OK
Chars per words: 6.17027027027 5.12529762239 120% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.38581623665 4.20363070211 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.43059005673 2.80592935109 122% => OK
Unique words: 235.0 176.041082164 133% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.635135135135 0.561755894193 113% => OK
syllable_count: 718.2 506.74238477 142% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.9 1.60771543086 118% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 5.43587174349 18% => OK
Article: 12.0 2.52805611222 475% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 8.0 4.76152304609 168% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 16.0721442886 112% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 34.4175970639 49.4020404114 70% => OK
Chars per sentence: 126.833333333 106.682146367 119% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.5555555556 20.7667163134 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.22222222222 7.06120827912 131% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 8.67935871743 150% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.130408746257 0.244688304435 53% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.040011746941 0.084324248473 47% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0354352590695 0.0667982634062 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0878570189951 0.151304729494 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0163401356689 0.056905535591 29% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.9 13.0946893788 137% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 25.8 50.2224549098 51% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 11.3001002004 129% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 18.51 12.4159519038 149% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 11.58 8.58950901804 135% => OK
difficult_words: 163.0 78.4519038076 208% => Less difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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