In some cultures, children are often told that they can achieve anything if they try hard enough.
What are the advantages and disadvantages of giving children this message?
Some cultures believe that hardworking can help people achieve everything. This sentiment can be a blessing and a curse for children raised under such cultures.
On the one hand, children may dedicate themselves to pursuing their goals and eventually building confidence in themselves. People who live under a culture promoting the spirit of hardworking are more likely to strive for their purposes. Instead of complaining about the outside circumstances, they focus on internal motivation. Moreover, with the belief that hardworking may eventually lead to some fruits, the possibility for people to insist on their long-term goal is relatively high. Take outstanding athletes, for example. They can hardly go through the strict and tiring practice without strong willpower for years.
On the other hand, there are inevitable shortcomings for such cultural beliefs. Firstly, suppose children blindly believe in such a theory. In that case, they may continue to work on something they are not even good at, which would waste time and talent at the end of the day. They may blame themselves for the failures, regardless of other coincident factors. This could significantly harm their self-image, which may be the origin of mental health issues. This can-do culture is common in East Asian countries, where psychological problems are common among young adults.
In conclusion, the cultural belief in hardworking can encourage children to devote themselves to achieving their goals. However, people should never overlook the related potential problems on children's development and mental health.
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Essay evaluations by e-grader
Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, however, if, look, may, moreover, so, for example, in conclusion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 13.1623246493 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 7.85571142285 165% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 10.4138276553 48% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 20.0 24.0651302605 83% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 41.998997996 81% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1358.0 1615.20841683 84% => OK
No of words: 244.0 315.596192385 77% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.56557377049 5.12529762239 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.95227774224 4.20363070211 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.85506052463 2.80592935109 102% => OK
Unique words: 149.0 176.041082164 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.610655737705 0.561755894193 109% => OK
syllable_count: 405.0 506.74238477 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.2975951904 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 28.8657994 49.4020404114 58% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 84.875 106.682146367 80% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.25 20.7667163134 73% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.1875 7.06120827912 88% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.9879759519 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.242024279902 0.244688304435 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0784615988053 0.084324248473 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0496275319705 0.0667982634062 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.164411935954 0.151304729494 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0328455619644 0.056905535591 58% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.4 13.0946893788 95% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 47.79 50.2224549098 95% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.3001002004 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.43 12.4159519038 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.91 8.58950901804 104% => OK
difficult_words: 70.0 78.4519038076 89% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.1190380762 79% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Minimum 250 words wanted.
Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, however, if, look, may, moreover, so, for example, in conclusion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 13.1623246493 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 7.85571142285 165% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 10.4138276553 48% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 20.0 24.0651302605 83% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 41.998997996 81% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1358.0 1615.20841683 84% => OK
No of words: 244.0 315.596192385 77% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.56557377049 5.12529762239 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.95227774224 4.20363070211 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.85506052463 2.80592935109 102% => OK
Unique words: 149.0 176.041082164 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.610655737705 0.561755894193 109% => OK
syllable_count: 405.0 506.74238477 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.2975951904 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 28.8657994 49.4020404114 58% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 84.875 106.682146367 80% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.25 20.7667163134 73% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.1875 7.06120827912 88% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.9879759519 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.242024279902 0.244688304435 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0784615988053 0.084324248473 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0496275319705 0.0667982634062 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.164411935954 0.151304729494 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0328455619644 0.056905535591 58% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.4 13.0946893788 95% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 47.79 50.2224549098 95% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.3001002004 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.43 12.4159519038 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.91 8.58950901804 104% => OK
difficult_words: 70.0 78.4519038076 89% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.1190380762 79% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Minimum 250 words wanted.
Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.