In some cultures, children are often told that they can achieve anything if they try hard enough.
What are the advantages and disadvantages of giving children this message?
In the contemporary society, children are encouraged to work harder in various ways one of which is by saying success comes to those who work hard. While there are some benefits to the advice, the drawbacks are not worth ignoring either and both sides will be discussed in the following essay.
To begin with, there are a few advantages of this advice. The youngsters will be inspired and motivated to work harder to achieve their goals. The sense of achievement will push them to explore and learn more. For example, when a student works hard and gets their desired result, they attain a sense of satisfaction and feel revigorated to pursue higher goals.
However, there are several disadvantages to this as well. If the children fail at a task for which they have provided their best effort, they tend to go into depression. As for those who become addicted to scoring achievements may become self-centered and in the face of possible failures may employ unethical means to protect their efforts from being hampered by others. For instance, a student who has practiced soccer to become the best, when encounters another who is a natural genius may try to harm them via dangerous means, so that the formers status is unaffected.
To sum up, children should not only be advised to work harder and be supported when they fail. Apart from these they should be guided on the right and wrong means of achieving this success.
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Comments
Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 544, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'formers'' or 'former's'?
Suggestion: formers'; former's
...m them via dangerous means, so that the formers status is unaffected. To sum up, chi...
^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, may, so, well, while, apart from, as for, for example, for instance, to begin with, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 18.0 24.0651302605 75% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 41.998997996 83% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1185.0 1615.20841683 73% => OK
No of words: 245.0 315.596192385 78% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.83673469388 5.12529762239 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.95632099841 4.20363070211 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.55787161627 2.80592935109 91% => OK
Unique words: 146.0 176.041082164 83% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.595918367347 0.561755894193 106% => OK
syllable_count: 362.7 506.74238477 72% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 5.43587174349 37% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 2.10420841683 285% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.906089146 49.4020404114 99% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.75 106.682146367 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.4166666667 20.7667163134 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.83333333333 7.06120827912 125% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.198119102076 0.244688304435 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0755623048999 0.084324248473 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0464516659661 0.0667982634062 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.116921647095 0.151304729494 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.029468941561 0.056905535591 52% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.6 13.0946893788 89% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 50.2224549098 119% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.3001002004 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.79 12.4159519038 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.56 8.58950901804 100% => OK
difficult_words: 61.0 78.4519038076 78% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Minimum 250 words wanted.
Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 544, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'formers'' or 'former's'?
Suggestion: formers'; former's
...m them via dangerous means, so that the formers status is unaffected. To sum up, chi...
^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, may, so, well, while, apart from, as for, for example, for instance, to begin with, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 18.0 24.0651302605 75% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 41.998997996 83% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1185.0 1615.20841683 73% => OK
No of words: 245.0 315.596192385 78% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.83673469388 5.12529762239 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.95632099841 4.20363070211 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.55787161627 2.80592935109 91% => OK
Unique words: 146.0 176.041082164 83% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.595918367347 0.561755894193 106% => OK
syllable_count: 362.7 506.74238477 72% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 5.43587174349 37% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 2.10420841683 285% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.906089146 49.4020404114 99% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.75 106.682146367 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.4166666667 20.7667163134 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.83333333333 7.06120827912 125% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.198119102076 0.244688304435 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0755623048999 0.084324248473 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0464516659661 0.0667982634062 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.116921647095 0.151304729494 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.029468941561 0.056905535591 52% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.6 13.0946893788 89% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 50.2224549098 119% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.3001002004 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.79 12.4159519038 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.56 8.58950901804 100% => OK
difficult_words: 61.0 78.4519038076 78% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Minimum 250 words wanted.
Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.