In some cultures, children are often told that they can achieve anything if they try hard enough
What are the advantages and disadvantages of giving children this message?
Children don’t have any border and limitation. It has become to a belief that should give something to a child if he/she do something. Even in some cultures teach to their children you will achieve to everything that you want if try hard enough. In my opinion there are lots of benefit sides that can shape and made child for future.
On the one side, encouraging children to reach their goals are very essential and necessary in earlier age of child. Not only can make a self-confidence feel in them but also, they know anything has a cost that for reaching it should pay a lot. Another positive affect is children can stand on their feet in their earlier years and it helps them in the future. Hardworking is another advantage that can mention. In addition, children con solve problems independently which is very important.
On the other side, educational systems should teach children achievement to their aims at any cost might loss something, which in most times led to loss most important thing or person. Parents has crucial role to talk about negative affects of devote many times to reaching your goals. For example, a child who has touch to be best football player and focus on his/her aim don’t has any feel about his parents and in addition cannot enjoy his life
In conclusion, with an appropriate education all children can reach their goals without loss anything or by minimum negative affect. I think the can deliver this message from adult that every thing con be done just you should try for it.
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Comments
Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 122, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'she' must be used with a third-person verb: 'does'.
Suggestion: does
...uld give something to a child if he/she do something. Even in some cultures teach ...
^^
Line 3, column 324, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[4]
Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'be the best'.
Suggestion: be the best
.... For example, a child who has touch to be best football player and focus on his/her ai...
^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, so, as to, for example, i think, in addition, in conclusion, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 13.1623246493 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 7.85571142285 165% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 24.0651302605 133% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 34.0 41.998997996 81% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1259.0 1615.20841683 78% => OK
No of words: 265.0 315.596192385 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.75094339623 5.12529762239 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.03470204552 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.49326326218 2.80592935109 89% => OK
Unique words: 158.0 176.041082164 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.596226415094 0.561755894193 106% => OK
syllable_count: 385.2 506.74238477 76% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 62.0004771885 49.4020404114 126% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.8461538462 106.682146367 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.3846153846 20.7667163134 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.84615384615 7.06120827912 97% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.247891936591 0.244688304435 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0832326926623 0.084324248473 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0580608902062 0.0667982634062 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.1481933082 0.151304729494 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0682038137348 0.056905535591 120% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.1 13.0946893788 85% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 50.2224549098 119% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.3001002004 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.27 12.4159519038 83% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.85 8.58950901804 91% => OK
difficult_words: 54.0 78.4519038076 69% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 122, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'she' must be used with a third-person verb: 'does'.
Suggestion: does
...uld give something to a child if he/she do something. Even in some cultures teach ...
^^
Line 3, column 324, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[4]
Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'be the best'.
Suggestion: be the best
.... For example, a child who has touch to be best football player and focus on his/her ai...
^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, so, as to, for example, i think, in addition, in conclusion, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 13.1623246493 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 7.85571142285 165% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 24.0651302605 133% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 34.0 41.998997996 81% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1259.0 1615.20841683 78% => OK
No of words: 265.0 315.596192385 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.75094339623 5.12529762239 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.03470204552 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.49326326218 2.80592935109 89% => OK
Unique words: 158.0 176.041082164 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.596226415094 0.561755894193 106% => OK
syllable_count: 385.2 506.74238477 76% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 62.0004771885 49.4020404114 126% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.8461538462 106.682146367 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.3846153846 20.7667163134 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.84615384615 7.06120827912 97% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.247891936591 0.244688304435 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0832326926623 0.084324248473 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0580608902062 0.0667982634062 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.1481933082 0.151304729494 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0682038137348 0.056905535591 120% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.1 13.0946893788 85% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 50.2224549098 119% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.3001002004 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.27 12.4159519038 83% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.85 8.58950901804 91% => OK
difficult_words: 54.0 78.4519038076 69% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.