In some cultures, children are often told that they can achieve anything if they try hard enough. What are the advantages and disadvantages of giving children this message?
It is often observed that people in some countries convince the young generation to attain their goals. Moreover, to get the targets youth have to work hard.
Firstly, children get the purpose to study better. In other words, when young people study at school, they do not reflect about their future. Students, who know that it can help them to achieve something, therefore, try to study hard. For example, according to the research British sociologists, more than sixty percent of children who strive to fulfill their goals become successful in their future.
Secondly, this statement can influence the young generation's mind. Typically, children are able to believe adults, whereas, they are able to follow these words and make an effort to be better for their future. They create new ideas and think about how to attain their wishes.
On the other hand, these words can persuade children in the false hopes. In this situation, if young people face with reality, they can be hurt. There are situations, when children, who are intelligent and excellent students, but they can not achieve their purposes. It is connected with very high level of their goals. For instance, The Guardian wrote that majority of young people lose the interest to study, if they do not see results of their works.
In conclusion, I can say that people, who give advice to achieve goals by hard work, stimulate the young generation to be educated. To my mind, the advantages of this statement outweigh the drawbacks, but people have to talk about it with accuracy without forcing children.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 126, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'targets'' or 'target's'?
Suggestion: targets'; target's
...ttain their goals. Moreover, to get the targets youth have to work hard. Firstly, ch...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, therefore, whereas, for example, for instance, in conclusion, in other words, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 10.4138276553 48% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 24.0651302605 129% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 38.0 41.998997996 90% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1321.0 1615.20841683 82% => OK
No of words: 262.0 315.596192385 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.04198473282 5.12529762239 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.02323427807 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.4748281147 2.80592935109 88% => OK
Unique words: 146.0 176.041082164 83% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.557251908397 0.561755894193 99% => OK
syllable_count: 389.7 506.74238477 77% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 5.43587174349 166% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.2975951904 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 36.3811743042 49.4020404114 74% => OK
Chars per sentence: 82.5625 106.682146367 77% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.375 20.7667163134 79% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.5 7.06120827912 135% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.268538999015 0.244688304435 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0910103431663 0.084324248473 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0497046203286 0.0667982634062 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.151772083577 0.151304729494 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0435157594319 0.056905535591 76% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.5 13.0946893788 80% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 50.2224549098 127% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 11.3001002004 74% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.66 12.4159519038 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.17 8.58950901804 95% => OK
difficult_words: 62.0 78.4519038076 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 9.78957915832 66% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.1190380762 83% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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