In some cultures children are often told that they can achieve anything if they try hard enough What are the advantages and disadvantages of giving children this massage

Nowadays, numerous adults believe that practice makes perfect, leading to a consequence that their children also have a faith in the idiom. However, folk sayings seem not to be quite right in this society these days, they are not only beneficial but adverse as well.

On the one hand, this message is advantageous to the young generation in different ways. Everyone knows that children usually have countless sweet dreams as well as innovative thoughts at the beginning of their lives and they think nothing is impossible. When grownups encourage them to pursue their passions and believe in them, they will become the greatest versions of themselves thanks to working hard, staying positive, or never giving up whether how hard their dreams are. Put differently, when the juvenile mature and start actualizing their dreams, they will surely encounter hardships. Furthermore, these sophisticated children will not quit in any way and keep on staying motivated if they learned that persistence and hard work will get them through.

As a doubled-edge sword, everything has its own benefits and drawbacks. In this situation, children who have a faith in the idiom will encounter some issues. First of all, owing to believing nothing is impossible, they will set unrealistic goals for themselves and force or think they can achieve that. For instance, some teenagers think that they are able to be millionaires at the age of 16 and when they turn that age, they will get depression because of not getting what they desire. Secondly, children may push themselves to their limits or work too hard until exhausted which affects them negatively. This is able to be exemplified by bookworms because they want to be the top students and struggle with mental health problems such as insomnia, atychiphobia, OCD, anxiety, isolation,...

In conclusion, in spite of the fact that it is beneficial to tell children practice makes perfect towards a goal always yields positive consequence, it also causes them numerous psychological issues.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, well, for instance, in conclusion, such as, as well as, first of all, in spite of

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 7.30460921844 178% => OK
Pronoun: 43.0 24.0651302605 179% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 34.0 41.998997996 81% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1707.0 1615.20841683 106% => OK
No of words: 327.0 315.596192385 104% => OK
Chars per words: 5.22018348624 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.25242769721 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80943736447 2.80592935109 100% => OK
Unique words: 195.0 176.041082164 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.596330275229 0.561755894193 106% => OK
syllable_count: 503.1 506.74238477 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 5.43587174349 166% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.1421636561 49.4020404114 89% => OK
Chars per sentence: 121.928571429 106.682146367 114% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.3571428571 20.7667163134 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.8571428571 7.06120827912 154% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.283573358171 0.244688304435 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0927816822717 0.084324248473 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0481419141994 0.0667982634062 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.151266636442 0.151304729494 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0825825381723 0.056905535591 145% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.8 13.0946893788 113% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 50.2224549098 113% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.29 12.4159519038 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.4 8.58950901804 98% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 78.4519038076 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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