Some educationalists say every child should be taught to play musical instrument To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement

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Some educationalists say every child should be taught to play musical instrument..
To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

It is generally that there are some educators who think that children should learn about musical instrument. In my view, music is a kind of subject that not compulsory in academic and it does not important if they don’t have it in education program. However, this subject can be used as one of the last solution in order to get score easier for students so that they don’t have to stay in their grade for an another year.

Moreover, there are many reason that prove music should become a part of education program. First of all, it is about the tradition. Every country in the world has their own songs to represent for their country and teaching student those songs is also teaching them how to maintain and develop the culture of their country. Second, Music can be used as a way to entertain after stressful classes. Furthermore, to make daily academic work become effectively, a music class put in the middle of the day is a good idea. While in that class, student can listen to the music, singing and playing musical instruments as bands, then they forget every things that make them exhausted and have more spirit to their next class.

From my view of point, music is an easy way to get score for weak students such as anyone get bad score at the middle and the last academic test as well as receiving a big chance to learn another year in the same grade. To get score in music, student just simply need to sing a song with a clearly voice and when the teacher listened to it, the student got score. Beside that, this is not only apply for terrible student but also the excellent ones too by helping them to become the best learner in their school.

Overall, even though music is recommended to be put in academic program by some experts, I do not think it is too necessary to do that because without music, schools still can work normally. However, in some situation, it can be the last choice for anyone who have no prediction to stay and learn one more academic.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 406, Rule ID: AN_ANOTHER[1]
Message: One of these determiners is redundant in this context. Choose only one: 'a year' or 'another year'.
Suggestion: a year; another year
...y don’t have to stay in their grade for an another year. Moreover, there are many reason tha...
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Line 3, column 21, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun reason seems to be countable; consider using: 'many reasons'.
Suggestion: many reasons
...an another year. Moreover, there are many reason that prove music should become a part o...
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Line 5, column 91, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'anyone' must be used with a third-person verb: 'gets'.
Suggestion: gets
... score for weak students such as anyone get bad score at the middle and the last ac...
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Line 5, column 289, Rule ID: A_RB_NN[1]
Message: You used an adverb ('clearly') instead an adjective, or a noun ('voice') instead of another adjective.
...nt just simply need to sing a song with a clearly voice and when the teacher listened to it, th...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, however, if, moreover, second, so, still, then, well, while, kind of, such as, as well as, first of all, in my view

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 7.30460921844 164% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 24.0651302605 141% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 47.0 41.998997996 112% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1627.0 1615.20841683 101% => OK
No of words: 360.0 315.596192385 114% => OK
Chars per words: 4.51944444444 5.12529762239 88% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.35587717469 4.20363070211 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.3032970866 2.80592935109 82% => OK
Unique words: 183.0 176.041082164 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.508333333333 0.561755894193 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 507.6 506.74238477 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.60771543086 87% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 49.8232078535 49.4020404114 101% => OK
Chars per sentence: 116.214285714 106.682146367 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.7142857143 20.7667163134 124% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.4285714286 7.06120827912 148% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.160016614545 0.244688304435 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0613316956167 0.084324248473 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0475404163666 0.0667982634062 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.105278694375 0.151304729494 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0358545861362 0.056905535591 63% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.7 13.0946893788 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 63.02 50.2224549098 125% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.23 12.4159519038 74% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.25 8.58950901804 84% => OK
difficult_words: 54.0 78.4519038076 69% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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