Some people argue that too much attention and too many resources are given to the protection of wild animals and birds. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Many people argue that wild animals and birds are attracting too much concern and utilizing too many societal resources.In my opinion, I totally agree with this point of view.
There are two key reasons why the human has paid too much attention to wild animals and birds. First of all, many non-government are established for fight to negative action on them. This concerns are unfounded and should be spent on some important things. For example, flora that produce oxygen, absorb carbon dioxide and stabilize the earth’s climate. Secondly, nowadays, social network developt with rapidly speed so any hunted action or worse treated on animals and birds will be condemned strongly. If you treated a dog in hardness way and after that you up your own video on facebook, you would be strongly opposed from community.
On the other hand, people also have spent too many societal resources on wild animals and birds. One of them is sanctuary which waste lots of money. The more people detain animals and birds,the more losting wild they get. Futhermore the expenditure for research on DNA of animals and birds is quite unnecessary. The funds should be allocated to address more important problems. For instance, many people can’t meet their basic needs like food, beverage and home. Lots of people face up to life-threatening diseases such as HIV and cancer which have not been treated.
In conclusion, I completely with the conservation wild animals and birds but it is unnecessary to spend too much attention and too many substantial resources for them.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, second, secondly, so, for example, for instance, in conclusion, such as, first of all, in my opinion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 10.4138276553 154% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 18.0 24.0651302605 75% => OK
Preposition: 29.0 41.998997996 69% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1315.0 1615.20841683 81% => OK
No of words: 257.0 315.596192385 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.11673151751 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.00390054096 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68226912696 2.80592935109 96% => OK
Unique words: 157.0 176.041082164 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.610894941634 0.561755894193 109% => OK
syllable_count: 403.2 506.74238477 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.2975951904 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 35.703345626 49.4020404114 72% => OK
Chars per sentence: 87.6666666667 106.682146367 82% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.1333333333 20.7667163134 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.4 7.06120827912 133% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.367628327852 0.244688304435 150% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.111479737243 0.084324248473 132% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.124304287108 0.0667982634062 186% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.253085334586 0.151304729494 167% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0682929349673 0.056905535591 120% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.3 13.0946893788 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 50.2224549098 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.3001002004 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.12 12.4159519038 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.53 8.58950901804 99% => OK
difficult_words: 66.0 78.4519038076 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.1190380762 87% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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