Some people believe that children of all ages should have extra responsibilities example, helping at home or at work). Others believe that, outside of school, children should be free to enjoy their lives. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
It is believed that children of all ages should have additional responsibilities while others think that enjoying their life is more crucial. In my essay, I will discuss both notions and explain why I agree with the latter.
On the one hand there are several reasons why taking our extra responsibilities outside school hours is crucial in advancing children's skill. First of all, participating in activities like household chores helps them understand the hardship that the parents do in raising them. By doing household works, teens feel their parent's unconditional love and this emotion encourage them studying hard and become a good students. Secondly taking on more responsibilities will help to develop children's skills which well-prepared for their adulthood in the future. This is because children can learn how to cooking, taking care of them, managing time efficiently or making a financial plan by assisting their parents with household chores. This completely makes them more mature and become good citizens.
On the other hand, there are more compelling reasons why giving children the freedom to enjoy their childhood time without excessive responsibilities. First and foremost, leisure time after a plenty of studying hours could offer relaxation for children which has reduced studying pressure. Obviously, children these days often face mental health problems due to studying pressure or parental expectations. Therefore relaxing time is not only the best approach to help children unwind but also giving them a chance to regenerate their brain function that contributes to their overall well being. To add concredence to my agreement, enjoying their childhood time would be considered as the appropriate method in promoting children's social and emotional skills. Through interactions with their peers during play, teens learn important social skills such as cooperation , teamwork skills or communication skills, especially providing them with an emotional outlet that allows them to reduce stress.
In conclusion, while children should take more responsibilities such as doing household work in developing their skills, I firmly believe that they can freely engage in extracurricular activities and enjoy their childhood time without any pressures.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, second, secondly, so, therefore, well, while, in conclusion, such as, first of all, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 37.0 24.0651302605 154% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 39.0 41.998997996 93% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1935.0 1615.20841683 120% => OK
No of words: 343.0 315.596192385 109% => OK
Chars per words: 5.64139941691 5.12529762239 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.30351707066 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.99396448717 2.80592935109 107% => OK
Unique words: 206.0 176.041082164 117% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.600583090379 0.561755894193 107% => OK
syllable_count: 572.4 506.74238477 113% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.1906770454 49.4020404114 96% => OK
Chars per sentence: 129.0 106.682146367 121% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.8666666667 20.7667163134 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.2 7.06120827912 116% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.01903807615 120% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 8.67935871743 161% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.247711095838 0.244688304435 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0916476260132 0.084324248473 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0853605531627 0.0667982634062 128% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.184063103785 0.151304729494 122% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0685558672869 0.056905535591 120% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.6 13.0946893788 127% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.69 50.2224549098 81% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 11.3001002004 116% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.73 12.4159519038 127% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.73 8.58950901804 102% => OK
difficult_words: 87.0 78.4519038076 111% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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