some people believe that computers and the internet carry more weight than traditional education in children's study. Some others believe that traditional schooling and teachers are still essential and more effective. Discuss both viewpoints and give your opinion.
Although it is sometimes thought that technology and the internet have more benefits comparing the traditional education system, while other think traditional methods and teachers are still effective and necessary. Personally, in my opinion, however tones of scientist cultivated in traditional education system, teaching by using online resources and technology are more convenience in modern era.
On the one hand, new teaching methods by using information technology leads teachers to teach children more loosily and they are able to give students more detailed information. In that case, children become more enthusiastic for learning. For example, tutors illustrate some kind of videos or photos, which are related to the subject, and it draw attention of children to specific points in lesson. Furthermore, professional training teachers and students are able to take advantage of educational experiences of citizens of other countries. Thus, they get in company with others and reached wide range of information in online resources. For instance, students and tutors are able to find a lot of information about their researching subject on internet.
On the other hand, a myriad of scientists or professionals get benefit of traditional schooling system. First of all, traditional methods are more simple comparing new technological system. Therefore, people posses limited range of information in the case of utilising only some books and people do not confused as a consequence of wrong data on internet. Secondly, while new methods and internet resources are drive children to achieve the best and give extrinsic motivation, strict traditional teachers trigger children to make a great effort in order to being successful and built intrinsic motivation.
In conclusion, while people may vary in their opinions, in my point of view, online resources and developed technology posses more profound positive impacts on children's study in technological modern era.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 343, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'draws'?
Suggestion: draws
...hich are related to the subject, and it draw attention of children to specific point...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, furthermore, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, still, therefore, thus, while, for example, for instance, in conclusion, kind of, first of all, in my opinion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 7.85571142285 13% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 10.4138276553 154% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 7.30460921844 41% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 10.0 24.0651302605 42% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 41.998997996 110% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.3376753507 156% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1675.0 1615.20841683 104% => OK
No of words: 298.0 315.596192385 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.62080536913 5.12529762239 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.15483772266 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.03640100994 2.80592935109 108% => OK
Unique words: 161.0 176.041082164 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.540268456376 0.561755894193 96% => OK
syllable_count: 536.4 506.74238477 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.60771543086 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 5.43587174349 18% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.6561482826 49.4020404114 109% => OK
Chars per sentence: 128.846153846 106.682146367 121% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.9230769231 20.7667163134 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 14.4615384615 7.06120827912 205% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.282749772487 0.244688304435 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.101398880581 0.084324248473 120% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0528531356717 0.0667982634062 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.171292183968 0.151304729494 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0648788933998 0.056905535591 114% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.5 13.0946893788 126% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 32.22 50.2224549098 64% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 11.3001002004 126% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.61 12.4159519038 126% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.23 8.58950901804 107% => OK
difficult_words: 85.0 78.4519038076 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 9.78957915832 133% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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