some people believe that it is important to give gifts and presents to friends and family to show that we are care about them. others think that there are better ways to show affection to them. discuss both views and give your own opinion.

There are people who count on the repercussions of giving gifts or presents for their acquaintance
Such as family members or friends is significant behavior to show their importance for you, while
Others opinion is that it is not the only way to show your value for your dear people. From my point
Of view Both of them are vitally important in people’s life
Nowadays, giving gifts for people is becoming usual habit to have , on some circumstance people
Want to show how they love them . Firstly, when someone is going to present some gift to his or her
Friend on their birthday or festivals so that the way of showing how they are dear for them or to have
A tight relationship amongst them. Secondly, family member are always congratulate each other
By giving presents, as a result each member of family feels that his or her value in their family ,
Finally, these kind of people have great relationship with other people.
On the other hand, obtaining the presents is not the only way to illustrate the value of closeness.
People show their kindness for some people for instance , revealing their task achievements
For their family as a surprise or doing one activity that can make person happy. However, there are
Some financial situation that people cannot afford to buy present or gifts and they tries to depict that they adore the person by doing their best work or activity they are able to cope with. These kind
Of people are not upset of these occasions of life
In conclusion, I am going to mention that there is not any cost for care about their dear people
And human’s kind cannot be graded by gifts or achievements , while it has a profound importance of
Being closer with each other.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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...r people is becoming usual habit to have , on some circumstance people Want to sh...
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... people Want to show how they love them . Firstly, when someone is going to prese...
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Line 8, column 71, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'congratulated'.
Suggestion: congratulated
...hem. Secondly, family member are always congratulate each other By giving presents, as a r...
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Line 9, column 98, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
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Suggestion: ,
...ls that his or her value in their family , Finally, these kind of people have gre...
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Line 10, column 10, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this kind' or 'these kinds'?
Suggestion: this kind; these kinds
...r her value in their family , Finally, these kind of people have great relationship with ...
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... great relationship with other people. On the other hand, obtaining the present...
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Suggestion: ,
...ir kindness for some people for instance , revealing their task achievements For ...
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Line 13, column 100, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
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...an make person happy. However, there are Some financial situation that people can...
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Line 14, column 16, Rule ID: THERE_RE_MANY[3]
Message: Possible agreement error. Did you mean 'situations'?
Suggestion: situations
...py. However, there are Some financial situation that people cannot afford to buy presen...
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Line 14, column 85, Rule ID: NON3PRS_VERB[2]
Message: The pronoun 'they' must be used with a non-third-person form of a verb: 'try'
Suggestion: try
...afford to buy present or gifts and they tries to depict that they adore the person by...
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Line 14, column 193, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this kind' or 'These kinds'?
Suggestion: This kind; These kinds
...or activity they are able to cope with. These kind Of people are not upset of these occ...
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Line 15, column 34, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
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... kind Of people are not upset of these occasions of life In conclusion...
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... not upset of these occasions of life In conclusion, I am going to mention tha...
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Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...annot be graded by gifts or achievements , while it has a profound importance of ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, firstly, however, if, second, secondly, so, while, for instance, in conclusion, kind of, such as, as a result, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 13.1623246493 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 7.85571142285 38% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 39.0 24.0651302605 162% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 38.0 41.998997996 90% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1435.0 1615.20841683 89% => OK
No of words: 300.0 315.596192385 95% => OK
Chars per words: 4.78333333333 5.12529762239 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.16179145029 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.52176550518 2.80592935109 90% => OK
Unique words: 147.0 176.041082164 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.49 0.561755894193 87% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 436.5 506.74238477 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 8.0 16.0721442886 50% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 37.0 20.2975951904 182% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 60.2116060241 49.4020404114 122% => OK
Chars per sentence: 179.375 106.682146367 168% => OK
Words per sentence: 37.5 20.7667163134 181% => OK
Discourse Markers: 18.0 7.06120827912 255% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 18.0 4.38176352705 411% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 17.0 5.01903807615 339% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.34317914615 0.244688304435 140% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.162857583988 0.084324248473 193% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0891828327258 0.0667982634062 134% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.114387723186 0.151304729494 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0593150788609 0.056905535591 104% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 19.8 13.0946893788 151% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.38 50.2224549098 84% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 16.5 11.3001002004 146% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.04 12.4159519038 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.0 8.58950901804 93% => OK
difficult_words: 48.0 78.4519038076 61% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 17.5 9.78957915832 179% => OK
gunning_fog: 16.8 10.1190380762 166% => OK
text_standard: 17.0 10.7795591182 158% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.

Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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