By investing in tourism we can earn a lot of revenue and growth in national economy. At the same time it destroys the local culture. What is your opinion?
In our commercialised world, on of the business that can bring much benefit for national economy is tourism industry. Every country of the world are investing massive amount of money in tourism development, while it is shown that the local culture would have been affected dreadfully by multinational people. It seems to me that it has a profound influence on local culture extinction because of culture shock which is being introduced by other traditions.
In the world, travel to other countries have been ubiquitous after plane had been revolutionized and it leads for countries to have a tight relationship with other cultivations. Firstly, tourism industry contributes a great profit to country's economy to swift the development. Secondly, it is the best way to make the place famous throughout the world. Finally, people who have been looking for the place on their imagination, help them find a tranquil spot by touring the countries. As a consequence, government will increase the touristic place by funding and can create better place to live in.
However, thinking about benefit from tourists, country might lost it's origin when the new settlers depict their tradition for locals, it influence terribly to local habits disappearance when it feels them such a conventional culture. If in one place there multinational living souls, there might emerge a new tradition amongst them.
In conclusion, every nation has to have limitation for tourists, respect local cultures and celebrate it in an intimate friendship to protect the origin of their tradition.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, firstly, however, if, look, second, secondly, so, while, as to, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 10.4138276553 29% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 20.0 24.0651302605 83% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 41.998997996 81% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.3376753507 156% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1318.0 1615.20841683 82% => OK
No of words: 249.0 315.596192385 79% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.29317269076 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.97237131171 4.20363070211 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.96903151596 2.80592935109 106% => OK
Unique words: 150.0 176.041082164 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.602409638554 0.561755894193 107% => OK
syllable_count: 407.7 506.74238477 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.4201688189 49.4020404114 92% => OK
Chars per sentence: 119.818181818 106.682146367 112% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.6363636364 20.7667163134 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.90909090909 7.06120827912 126% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0890302285852 0.244688304435 36% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0354489758386 0.084324248473 42% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0345724917245 0.0667982634062 52% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0582377393592 0.151304729494 38% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0366906655274 0.056905535591 64% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.8 13.0946893788 113% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 50.2224549098 98% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.7 12.4159519038 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.1 8.58950901804 106% => OK
difficult_words: 69.0 78.4519038076 88% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 9.78957915832 153% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Minimum 250 words wanted.
Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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