Some people believe that unpaid community service should be a complusory part of high school programmes for example working for a charity improving the neighbourhood or teaching sports to youngger children

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Some people believe that unpaid community service should be a complusory part of high school programmes ( for example working for a charity , improving the neighbourhood or teaching sports to youngger children)

It is true that high school system should link with unpaid community service, because high school students can gian knowledge and experience by atending in those acticities. But I think that they should not be complusory, I believe that participate in those activities will help students learn more valueable skills.
In one hand, by becoming a part of voluntary society, students can get a lot of benefits. First of all , they are not only more confident and independent, but also their soft skills will be improved such as public speaking, management time. Unfortunately, nowadays students do not have many ativities after school, so they just watching TV, Playing video games and scrambing on social media after finished studying at school.
However, By attaining a healthy balance life for student, high school should give them a complusory to work with charitable or community organisation. In that way, they can gain more life skill and prevent them sitting at home and do nothing. In addition, the crime and sucide rate will reduced significantly, because students will be busy with their schedule and do not have time to be bored or negative.
In conclusion, unpaid community service is essential that can advocate for stuitdent’s life .

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: ,
... can get a lot of benefits. First of all , they are not only more confident and in...
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Message: The verb 'will' requires the base form of the verb: 'reduce'
Suggestion: reduce
...ddition, the crime and sucide rate will reduced significantly, because students will be...
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Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...not have time to be bored or negative. In conclusion, unpaid community service is...
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Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...l that can advocate for stuitdent’s life .
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, so, i think, in addition, in conclusion, such as, first of all, it is true

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 13.1623246493 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 18.0 24.0651302605 75% => OK
Preposition: 22.0 41.998997996 52% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1049.0 1615.20841683 65% => OK
No of words: 202.0 315.596192385 64% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.19306930693 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.76996954942 4.20363070211 90% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.83607557777 2.80592935109 101% => OK
Unique words: 133.0 176.041082164 76% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.658415841584 0.561755894193 117% => OK
syllable_count: 323.1 506.74238477 64% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 16.0721442886 56% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 34.4415769416 49.4020404114 70% => OK
Chars per sentence: 116.555555556 106.682146367 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.4444444444 20.7667163134 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.6666666667 7.06120827912 165% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.21467723449 0.244688304435 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0915769222534 0.084324248473 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0772430091714 0.0667982634062 116% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.141971242994 0.151304729494 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0463222474091 0.056905535591 81% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.2 13.0946893788 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 50.2224549098 98% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.12 12.4159519038 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.79 8.58950901804 102% => OK
difficult_words: 52.0 78.4519038076 66% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Minimum 250 words wanted.

Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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