Some people say that art subjects such as music, drama and creative writing are an essential part of education, and every school should include them in its syllabus. Do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give your opinion and examples from your own experience.
According to certain people, including artistic subjects as a school curricula is crucial, where it enables students to express themselves through creative approaches such as musical, theatrical, and creative essays. Existing such a cognitive-related program, in my perspective, would have a significant impact on students' imagination and creativity.
To embark on, the major reason for this is that in pedagogical activity, establishing some of creative programs in schools would enhance students' innovation. This is because they tend to be triggered to freely explore their own potential outside the main subjects that they learn in the classroom, and it possibly becomes a realm to show their unrevealed talent expressively. Were the schools to include these programs, it would create the school environment more ingenious. Moreover, by adding art subjects in schools syllabus, it provides students who have a strong interest in the entertainment industry opportunities to become actresses and singers. This is since this program trains students to play such as instrumental music and theater performances. To illustrate, most Indonesian artists are coming from formal schools that offer art-related classes before they have become well-known professional talents nowadays.
I do appreciate the opposing view saying that sometimes students might be distracted with this program and eventually less concerned with their formal education. However, it can be overcome by a well-managed timetable; it would unrestricted them on their own subject matter.
In conclusion, it seems to me that implementing artistic subjects in school lesson plans allows pupils to dig into their personal creativity. This ranges from creating exciting environments in schools and broadening students’ interest about pursuing other potential career endeavors, such as in entertainment.
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Suggestion: students'; student's
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, moreover, so, well, in conclusion, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 24.0651302605 133% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 38.0 41.998997996 90% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1604.0 1615.20841683 99% => OK
No of words: 273.0 315.596192385 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.87545787546 5.12529762239 115% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.06481385082 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.1954411434 2.80592935109 114% => OK
Unique words: 171.0 176.041082164 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.626373626374 0.561755894193 112% => OK
syllable_count: 477.0 506.74238477 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 5.43587174349 166% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.5569012744 49.4020404114 76% => OK
Chars per sentence: 133.666666667 106.682146367 125% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.75 20.7667163134 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.58333333333 7.06120827912 65% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.67935871743 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.196470150944 0.244688304435 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0738655791592 0.084324248473 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0256054721286 0.0667982634062 38% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.115855045951 0.151304729494 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0265245377712 0.056905535591 47% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.6 13.0946893788 134% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.69 50.2224549098 81% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 11.3001002004 116% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 17.12 12.4159519038 138% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.16 8.58950901804 118% => OK
difficult_words: 94.0 78.4519038076 120% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 9.78957915832 153% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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