Some people say patriotism is the biggest cause of war. But others believe that when people are patriotic, they are more likely to take an interest in a country's day-to-day running and therefore less likely to allow unscrupulous politicians to drive a country to war.
To what extent do you agree or disagree?
War and tension is believed to stem from blind patriotism by some. However, in accordance with another objective interpretation, the state at which individuals possess this sense of pride tends to drive their attention towards national progress and administrations are less inclined to let the country stay at the brink of war. I firmly concur with the latter notion for some reasons.
For one thing, blindly patriotism could potentially trigger individuals to be led astray. With regards to international tension, primarily in political issues, the side in which the administrations gain more edge in global conferences is likely to dominate other aspects. One inevitable ramification is that this leads to the growing emergence of reactionary entities, taking advantage from the country's contentious controversies, and arousing impulsive protests so as to justify the reason for one's rights. In the meantime, the outbreak of revolutions impose great pressures on governmental bodies, intensifying conflicts in both domestic and international contexts, since the public voice is indeed a potent influential factor thanks to democratic philosophy.
For another, from a different angle, patriotic sensation is deemed a remarkably positive factor to kindle one’s interest in national progress. The impulse of contributing to the joint effort in order to eliminate hindrance in acquiring high-ranking national reputation is widely possessed by personnel in various aspects. For instance, scientific breakthroughs or medical achievements could be attributed to the united endeavors of specialists, but all come from a pure desire to overcome poverty and incentive public well-being. In turn, this acts as a driving force for governments to allocate resources to meaningful pursuits rather than to weigh heavily on arms race.
To conclude, regardless of the possible culmination of raising patriotism is war, I contend that this sensation is fervently an important catalyst in fostering one’s appreciation to perpetuate meaningful contribution for the country.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 463, Rule ID: SO_AS_TO[1]
Message: Use simply 'to'
Suggestion: to
...ersies, and arousing impulsive protests so as to justify the reason for ones rights. In ...
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Line 2, column 495, Rule ID: ONES[1]
Message: Did you mean 'one's'?
Suggestion: one's
...rotests so as to justify the reason for ones rights. In the meantime, the outbreak o...
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Line 3, column 113, Rule ID: BE_INTEREST_IN[1]
Message: Did you mean 'interested'?
Suggestion: interested
...arkably positive factor to kindle one’s interest in national progress. The impulse of co...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, so, well, as to, for instance, for one thing
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 7.85571142285 25% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 9.0 24.0651302605 37% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 41.998997996 126% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.3376753507 156% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1760.0 1615.20841683 109% => OK
No of words: 305.0 315.596192385 97% => OK
Chars per words: 5.77049180328 5.12529762239 113% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.17902490978 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.28536369672 2.80592935109 117% => OK
Unique words: 201.0 176.041082164 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.659016393443 0.561755894193 117% => OK
syllable_count: 550.8 506.74238477 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.60771543086 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 68.8482126775 49.4020404114 139% => OK
Chars per sentence: 146.666666667 106.682146367 137% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.4166666667 20.7667163134 122% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.16666666667 7.06120827912 73% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.130441981515 0.244688304435 53% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0494638559416 0.084324248473 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.04728339962 0.0667982634062 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.079535951361 0.151304729494 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0318987124491 0.056905535591 56% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.5 13.0946893788 141% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 29.18 50.2224549098 58% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.4 11.3001002004 136% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 16.48 12.4159519038 133% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.99 8.58950901804 128% => OK
difficult_words: 118.0 78.4519038076 150% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.