Some people think students should study the science of food and how to prepare it. Others think students should spend time on important subjects.
Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
According to some, food science should be integrated in the school syllabus to teach students how to prepare it. However, I believe that attention should be paid on other important subjects for some reasons.
On the one hand, the option to teach students about the science of food is justified to some extent. Acquiring good culinary skills allows them to take control over their lives autonomously. Without understanding the magnitude of nutrients and food, they are likely to be susceptible to health illnesses since such courses provide parallel insight in the function of vitamins, minerals as well as the reaction of the body when absorbing toxic substances. Therefore, special courses are needed in order to alleviate their diet and lead a healthier life. As a result, they will work and study more efficiently.
On the other hand, I believe that these courses should not be compulsory since the school canteens have offered a nutritious diet already. Generally, students have been well-equipped with basic understandings about how to take care of themselves by their parents. Yet, there are some of the mandatory subjects for students who are going to graduate, precisely, these are the key subjects that teachers used to evaluate their overall performance. For instance, Vietnamese students must possess an 8 or above in math to successfully achieve an excellent-level degree. Furthermore, the domain they choose in the future may include career-specific skills and emphasis should be laid on the relevant subjects that allow them to optimize their potential. Hence, such subjects should be held in higher esteem to ensure their academic outcome and career prospects.
To conclude, although culinary courses are important to shape one’s fitness and health, I believe that those should be taken in accordance with students’ willingness and other essential subjects should be high on the agenda.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
furthermore, hence, however, if, may, so, therefore, well, for instance, as a result, as well as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 13.1623246493 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 24.0651302605 100% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 41.998997996 107% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1616.0 1615.20841683 100% => OK
No of words: 301.0 315.596192385 95% => OK
Chars per words: 5.36877076412 5.12529762239 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.16525528304 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.89675087994 2.80592935109 103% => OK
Unique words: 175.0 176.041082164 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.581395348837 0.561755894193 103% => OK
syllable_count: 493.2 506.74238477 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 56.0120704921 49.4020404114 113% => OK
Chars per sentence: 115.428571429 106.682146367 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.5 20.7667163134 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.21428571429 7.06120827912 116% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.67935871743 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.257165786355 0.244688304435 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.093889439714 0.084324248473 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0793242545903 0.0667982634062 119% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.186906255078 0.151304729494 124% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0867237503126 0.056905535591 152% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.6 13.0946893788 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 50.2224549098 100% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.87 12.4159519038 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.29 8.58950901804 108% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 78.4519038076 112% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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