some people say that teenager should work part time and earn money.this way they will learn basic lesson about work and become more disciplined .others argue that teenager shouldnt sacrifice rest and after school activities to work. disscuss both view and give your opinion.
Some people say that teenagers should work part-time and earn money. They believe, in this way, they will learn additional skills other than studies and become more disciplined. Others argue that teenagers shouldn't sacrifice their childhood life in working while they are still studying. In my opinion, availing a part-time job during once educational life could make them a disciplined person, but this work-life balance may also stimulate the stress level of the students.
On the one hand, most of the teenagers started to involve themselves in some works in their free time. Additionally, some started to earn money through this. For example, once the study time is over, during their leisure hours, they are trying to prove themselves to the outside world by struggling to get a work to do and for this plethora of efforts are probably taken from the students side.
On the other hand, contradicting, though all these jobs have their advantages in enhancing the personal character and independence of an individual, however, this is leading them to sacrifice the memorable and enjoyable childhood days in gaining money. In consequence, some get stressed out and are finally exhausted since they are missing their whole life running for the money and forgetting the extracurricular activities such as sports, swimming and so on. For instance, a person may be talented in gaining some additional knowledge in the curriculum, but he might not be able to succeed, which is because of other additional responsibilities which will be obviously running in their mind.
To conclude, Although we are getting a chance to know about society and get disciplined by opting for a part-time job, this is anyway creating more pressure for an individual student. Hence, it is better to avoid working in part-time jobs, still, we complete our student life properly with good grades. Because I believe, being a part of an organization will definitely pull a student down in his educational life.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: shouldn't
...isciplined. Others argue that teenagers shouldnt sacrifice their childhood life in worki...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, anyway, but, finally, hence, however, if, may, so, still, while, for example, for instance, such as, in my opinion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 32.0 24.0651302605 133% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 46.0 41.998997996 110% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1670.0 1615.20841683 103% => OK
No of words: 323.0 315.596192385 102% => OK
Chars per words: 5.17027863777 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.23936324884 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.85012392628 2.80592935109 102% => OK
Unique words: 190.0 176.041082164 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.588235294118 0.561755894193 105% => OK
syllable_count: 519.3 506.74238477 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 64.6721362497 49.4020404114 131% => OK
Chars per sentence: 128.461538462 106.682146367 120% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.8461538462 20.7667163134 120% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.6923076923 7.06120827912 151% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.358176686136 0.244688304435 146% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.150780174516 0.084324248473 179% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.124370673534 0.0667982634062 186% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.224555661004 0.151304729494 148% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.149802759901 0.056905535591 263% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.3 13.0946893788 117% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 50.2224549098 94% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.0 12.4159519038 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.44 8.58950901804 98% => OK
difficult_words: 74.0 78.4519038076 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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