Some people think that all teenagers should be required to do unpaid work in their free time to help the local community. They believe this would benefit both the individual teenager and society as a whole. Do you agree or disagree?
There is a popular belief that by having the adolescent to do volunteer work in their free time, not only they but also the society will have various benefical gain from it. Personally, I totally agree with this opinion. With the participation in public service, children will have a better chance to be more responsible and thus can bring more value to the community that they live in.
Adolescence is a complex phase when compared to other stages of psychological development where the teenager is constantly learning and developing their own personality traits. By having teenagers to be involved with the community work, we have created a setting that requires mature responsibilities and efforts which is extremely effective in cultivating the children. For examples, research has shown that teenagers who spent more time on volunteering are more likely to perform better in higher education than the control group. In addition, working with the locals as a leisure activity also keep the adolescent from involving in criminal activity or bad habit. Many social scientists have agreed that communities which are able to encourage more adolescent to participate in public service also have a lower number of juvenile criminal or adolescent drug abuse cases.
Besides being highly beneficial for the teenager’s life, the youth’s commitment in volunteering also increase the community welfare. For instances, in 2008, the youth union volunteer group in Vietnam has been able to raise 500.000.000 VND to build a school for children in a mountainous area. Furthermore, the involvement of both the adolescent and the adult in local work create an equal and respectful environment for the two age groups to have a better understanding of each other. Because of that, the grown-up can be more efficient in mentoring the adolescent and thus create better citizens for the society.
In conclusion, I think that we should have all the adolescent to participate in the public service as a leisure activity because of several potential benefits that it can bring to both the adolescent themselves and the society.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, furthermore, if, so, thus, for example, for instance, i think, in addition, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 7.30460921844 178% => OK
Pronoun: 20.0 24.0651302605 83% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 41.998997996 110% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1782.0 1615.20841683 110% => OK
No of words: 339.0 315.596192385 107% => OK
Chars per words: 5.25663716814 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.29091512845 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.0076549193 2.80592935109 107% => OK
Unique words: 189.0 176.041082164 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.557522123894 0.561755894193 99% => OK
syllable_count: 576.0 506.74238477 114% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 20.2975951904 128% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 43.1002683993 49.4020404114 87% => OK
Chars per sentence: 137.076923077 106.682146367 128% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.0769230769 20.7667163134 126% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.38461538462 7.06120827912 119% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.163773673567 0.244688304435 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0618624079688 0.084324248473 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0415431239849 0.0667982634062 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.104788445134 0.151304729494 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0327115026502 0.056905535591 57% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.4 13.0946893788 125% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 36.63 50.2224549098 73% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 11.3001002004 129% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.52 12.4159519038 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.26 8.58950901804 108% => OK
difficult_words: 93.0 78.4519038076 119% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 9.78957915832 128% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.1190380762 123% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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