Some people think that competition at work, at school and in daily life is a good thing. Others believes that we should try to cooperate more, rather than competing against each other.
Discuss both these views and give your opinion.
There is a saying ‘if your rival is better than you, you can get promoted’ means competition is always good and is an opportunity for growing. According to some, cooperate with each other is more practical rather than competition. In my opinion, both of them are necessary to grow your talents.
In many education systems have taught children to have a competition with each other. They believe with a good rival you can find your weaknesses and power. For instance, a child who is good in mathematic is a good rival for another student with does not good in it. thins makes to weak student try to prove him/herself to the teacher for changing his/her opinion about that child. This sense can help you in the future at work to keep yourself up-to-date daily because of your powerful colleagues. Although This is the good side of the story it can create a sense of revenge inside you as you cannot improve your skill enough.
On the other hand, there are numerous schools that learn to pupils have cooperate and teamworking with each other. Not only can improve the quality of your verbal communication skill if you have a member of a group but is also cause have lots and notions in your minds and the sense of creatively increase inside of you. Even though this method has these benefits, there are some negative effects for their lives if the future the point is they cannot do most of their works independent. Hence, I think educational systems should bring their students with a wonderful teamworking skills and very powerful rival for other careers in the future.
As a result, having a good balance between these two methods can have an awesome prospect in the future that you can competition with other professionals while you are solving your problem solely.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 73, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'cooperated'.
Suggestion: cooperated
...erous schools that learn to pupils have cooperate and teamworking with each other. Not on...
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Line 3, column 228, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'caused'.
Suggestion: caused
...ou have a member of a group but is also cause have lots and notions in your minds and...
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Line 3, column 496, Rule ID: EN_GB_SIMPLE_REPLACE
Message: I is a common American expression, in British English it is more common to use: I
Suggestion: I
...most of their works independent. Hence, I think educational systems should bring ...
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Line 4, column 198, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...le you are solving your problem solely.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, hence, if, so, while, for instance, i think, as a result, in my opinion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 41.0 24.0651302605 170% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 39.0 41.998997996 93% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1468.0 1615.20841683 91% => OK
No of words: 308.0 315.596192385 98% => OK
Chars per words: 4.76623376623 5.12529762239 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.18926351222 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.51309607468 2.80592935109 90% => OK
Unique words: 168.0 176.041082164 95% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.545454545455 0.561755894193 97% => OK
syllable_count: 459.0 506.74238477 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.2263096243 49.4020404114 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 104.857142857 106.682146367 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.0 20.7667163134 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.21428571429 7.06120827912 102% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.24293324575 0.244688304435 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0968084083991 0.084324248473 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0605146786961 0.0667982634062 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.162533067356 0.151304729494 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0517601185584 0.056905535591 91% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.0 13.0946893788 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 50.2224549098 115% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.39 12.4159519038 84% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.75 8.58950901804 90% => OK
difficult_words: 59.0 78.4519038076 75% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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