Some people think that cultural traditions may be destroyed when they are used as money-making traditions aimed at tourists. Others, however, believe that it is the only way to save these traditions.
Discuss both views and give your opinion.
Cultural traditions are now aimed at tourists so as to earn money. While many people believe that this may destroy their traditions, others think that money-making traditions is the only solution to save their culture. The essay below will mainly discuss both viewpoints.
On the one hand, many people say that once their traditions are used as a way to earn money, they will be destroyed due to many reasons. Firstly, money-making traditions are aimed at tourists instead of local young children. When traditions are used as a way to earn money, adults may become too busy making money; hence, they will forget their responsibility to teach children about cultural traditions. Moreover, due to the fact that these traditions depend on tourists, they are more likely destroyed. If tourists no longer have interest in these traditions, they will probably be forgotten and become extinct. Last but not least, when traditions turn into money-making ones, they are no longer cultural traditions because they have lost their pure beauty. They become a part of the tourism industry instead of the beauty of a place of interest.
On the other hand, many people think that money-making traditions are a good opportunity for saving these traditions due to the following reasons. The first reason is that this method can help these traditions become popular. If tourists enjoy the traditions, they will promote these traditions to their family, friends and other people. Another reason is that when young people see the prospect of earning money from these traditions, they will have more interest in saving them. Money is a vital factor in upholding cultural traditions; therefore, money is absolutely needed for keeping these cultural traditions.
In conclusion, there are different viewpoints on turning cultural traditions into money-making ones. From my point of view, I believe that earning money from these traditions is a good way to save and protect them when time is taken into consideration.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, hence, if, may, moreover, so, therefore, while, as to, in conclusion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 13.1623246493 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 10.4138276553 38% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 12.0 7.30460921844 164% => OK
Pronoun: 37.0 24.0651302605 154% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 35.0 41.998997996 83% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.3376753507 24% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1681.0 1615.20841683 104% => OK
No of words: 321.0 315.596192385 102% => OK
Chars per words: 5.23676012461 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.23278547379 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74641645606 2.80592935109 98% => OK
Unique words: 154.0 176.041082164 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.479750778816 0.561755894193 85% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 513.9 506.74238477 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 5.43587174349 166% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 34.1785460542 49.4020404114 69% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.8823529412 106.682146367 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.8823529412 20.7667163134 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.35294117647 7.06120827912 90% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.4128256513 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.519782807028 0.244688304435 212% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.191194156695 0.084324248473 227% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0876865563847 0.0667982634062 131% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.356649401725 0.151304729494 236% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0574606057605 0.056905535591 101% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.7 13.0946893788 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 50.2224549098 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.3001002004 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.11 12.4159519038 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.58 8.58950901804 88% => OK
difficult_words: 62.0 78.4519038076 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 9.78957915832 77% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.7795591182 74% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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