Some people think that hard work and determination bring success. Others think other factors such as money and good appearance are more important. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
It is true that hard work and determination are two key factors to get success in life, whereas, some people do believe that money and good appearance play more important roles. While all these are necessary, I would strongly agree that hard work is definitely the most essential factor for those who wish to achieve success.
On the one hand, it is undoubtledy that things like money, wealth and smart appearance are considered to be vital in bringing success at work as well as in daily life.
Firstly, jobs such as bank officers or flight attendants do require people with good-looking outward aspects such as smart face, beautiful smile or the average height. There is an online survey conducted by students in the University of Economics Ho Chi Minh city that people with good appearance tend to have more job opportunities than people who do not. Besides, money or wealthy is also a vital factor in order to **get a head in life.** Pretending that you are a start-up, your priority now is marketing your business to potential partners as well as target customers. Without money, it seems to be extremely difficult to **develop contacts** with rich and influential people or hiring KOLs (Key Opinion Leaders) and famous people to advertise your brand.
On the other hand, comparing to money and appearance, hard work and determination are so far the most value elements in seeking for success and recognition.
There is one famous sentence :"Genius only has 1% talent, 99% is hard work". If you have 100$ but no dedication and no laboriousness, that 100$ will be gone. However, if you have 10$ but 100% hard work and studiousness, you will raise that 10$ to 100$ and even 100 million dollars.
From a perspective of the employers, the employees with good and hard-working performances will obviously have more promotion opportunities and high wages comparing to others.
In conclusion, as money and smart appearance are so precious in modern world, hard work is, in my opinion, the most important.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: The currency mark is usually put at the beginning of the number: '$100'.
Suggestion: $100
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Message: The currency mark is usually put at the beginning of the number: '$100'.
Suggestion: $100
...o dedication and no laboriousness, that 100$ will be gone. However, if you have 10$ ...
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Message: The currency mark is usually put at the beginning of the number: '$10'.
Suggestion: $10
...100$ will be gone. However, if you have 10$ but 100% hard work and studiousness, yo...
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Message: The currency mark is usually put at the beginning of the number: '$10'.
Suggestion: $10
...k and studiousness, you will raise that 10$ to 100$ and even 100 million dollars. ...
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Message: The currency mark is usually put at the beginning of the number: '$100'.
Suggestion: $100
...tudiousness, you will raise that 10$ to 100$ and even 100 million dollars. From a...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, first, firstly, however, if, look, so, well, whereas, while, in conclusion, such as, as well as, in my opinion, it is true, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 13.1623246493 137% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 10.4138276553 192% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 24.0651302605 91% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 41.998997996 86% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.3376753507 132% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1691.0 1615.20841683 105% => OK
No of words: 338.0 315.596192385 107% => OK
Chars per words: 5.00295857988 5.12529762239 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.28774723029 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.85105342892 2.80592935109 102% => OK
Unique words: 192.0 176.041082164 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.568047337278 0.561755894193 101% => OK
syllable_count: 508.5 506.74238477 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 20.2975951904 128% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 38.3288480353 49.4020404114 78% => OK
Chars per sentence: 130.076923077 106.682146367 122% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.0 20.7667163134 125% => OK
Discourse Markers: 12.3846153846 7.06120827912 175% => OK
Paragraphs: 7.0 4.38176352705 160% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.330827498072 0.244688304435 135% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.111273922656 0.084324248473 132% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0762435464657 0.0667982634062 114% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.151653730679 0.151304729494 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0708510703946 0.056905535591 125% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.1 13.0946893788 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.55 50.2224549098 107% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.02 12.4159519038 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.66 8.58950901804 101% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 78.4519038076 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 9.78957915832 143% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.1190380762 123% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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