Task 2: Some people think that hard work and determination bring success. Others think other factors such as money and good appearance are more important. Discuss both views and give your opinion?
It is true that nowadays, hard work and effort play a crucial role for individuals to move up to a career ladder. Meanwhile, many people suppose that good financial background and a smart appearance are the most crucial. As far as I am concerned, the aforementioned factors possess equivalent importance for a successful career.
On the one hand, it is incontrovertible that determination to work is of paramount importance for a prosperous career. In terms of workplace pressure, these days, most jobs tend to impose heavy workloads on employers. Even some low-paid occupations including shop assistants, waiters, or order pickers, which offer minimum wage with limited job prospects, also demand dedication. From the family perspective, simply supporting a family also requires commitment and a lot of effort to maintain a close-knit family. Furthermore, parental involvement is also one of the rudimental factors to support children to enter adult life, as well as pursue a successful career.
On the other hand, money and smart appearance are indispensable parts for individuals to gain a competitive edge over other colleagues in the workplace. Firstly, without money, it is impossible to run your own business or develop relationships with influential people who can potentially offer you a good job prospect or help you to get ahead in life. Secondly, those who possess attractive appearances are likely to receive more attention from the interviewers when applying for a job, especially in marketing or international corporations, in which frequent communication and negotiation with customers are compulsory.
In conclusion, although people put forward several opinions about what are the most significant factors for a successful career, I believe that each aspect exhibits distinct impacts on the career of individuals.
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Comments
Essay evaluations by e-grader
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, furthermore, if, second, secondly, so, well, while, even so, in conclusion, as well as, it is true, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 7.85571142285 13% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 14.0 24.0651302605 58% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 41.998997996 83% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.3376753507 132% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1560.0 1615.20841683 97% => OK
No of words: 282.0 315.596192385 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.53191489362 5.12529762239 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.09790868904 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.30184310636 2.80592935109 118% => OK
Unique words: 177.0 176.041082164 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.627659574468 0.561755894193 112% => OK
syllable_count: 491.4 506.74238477 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.3496594607 49.4020404114 100% => OK
Chars per sentence: 130.0 106.682146367 122% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.5 20.7667163134 113% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.5833333333 7.06120827912 164% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.187448837404 0.244688304435 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0631887970653 0.084324248473 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0433928396897 0.0667982634062 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.104210304741 0.151304729494 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0326971053355 0.056905535591 57% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.4 13.0946893788 125% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 39.67 50.2224549098 79% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 11.3001002004 119% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.09 12.4159519038 122% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.76 8.58950901804 114% => OK
difficult_words: 89.0 78.4519038076 113% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, furthermore, if, second, secondly, so, well, while, even so, in conclusion, as well as, it is true, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 7.85571142285 13% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 14.0 24.0651302605 58% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 41.998997996 83% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.3376753507 132% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1560.0 1615.20841683 97% => OK
No of words: 282.0 315.596192385 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.53191489362 5.12529762239 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.09790868904 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.30184310636 2.80592935109 118% => OK
Unique words: 177.0 176.041082164 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.627659574468 0.561755894193 112% => OK
syllable_count: 491.4 506.74238477 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.3496594607 49.4020404114 100% => OK
Chars per sentence: 130.0 106.682146367 122% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.5 20.7667163134 113% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.5833333333 7.06120827912 164% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.187448837404 0.244688304435 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0631887970653 0.084324248473 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0433928396897 0.0667982634062 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.104210304741 0.151304729494 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0326971053355 0.056905535591 57% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.4 13.0946893788 125% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 39.67 50.2224549098 79% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 11.3001002004 119% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.09 12.4159519038 122% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.76 8.58950901804 114% => OK
difficult_words: 89.0 78.4519038076 113% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.