Some people think that public health is the responsibility of the government while others think that people should be responsible for their own health.
Discuss both views and give your opinion
It is believed by some that the legal authorities should be responsible for public health , whereas others argue that individuals should take care of their own health . This essay will discuss both views and give my opinion.
On the one hand, the government can propose several public strategies to improve health . Firstly, eating habits play a crucial role in humans’ health . Junk food or sugar notoriously appear in most of their unhealthy meals . Increasing tax on these foods, for instance, should be implemented to encourage people to be healthier. Similarly, the authorities should restrict the average age on cigarette and alcohol drinks toward teenagers from 16 to 18 years old. Another approach affecting public health is to build a large number of training gyms in rural areas and cities, or provide citizens with free facilities in public parks . This is likely to motivate everyone to maintain a healthy lifestyle by using these equipment which benefits their health.
On the other hand, apart from governments’ efforts , it would be a better thing if individuals might focus on their own health in the following ways. First of all, daily diets consumed everyday should be regulated reasonably . Unhealthy drinks such as milk tea or beers are always fundamental factors in rising obesity issues. If an individual can take care of their health, the government may focus on other social concerns which are more serious. Additionally, people ought to have casual health-checkup at hospitals because some serious illnesses such as cancer or high blood pressure should be diagnosed as soon as possible.
In conclusion, I personally believe that both the authorities and individuals have responsibility for public health. Governments are capable of preventing toxic lifestyles by promoting training among residents so that each person should obey these strategies because health is always a concerning issue which easily threatens every survival.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, if, may, similarly, so, whereas, apart from, for instance, in conclusion, such as, first of all, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 7.85571142285 178% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 18.0 24.0651302605 75% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 41.998997996 88% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1650.0 1615.20841683 102% => OK
No of words: 306.0 315.596192385 97% => OK
Chars per words: 5.39215686275 5.12529762239 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.18244613648 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.86505991192 2.80592935109 102% => OK
Unique words: 195.0 176.041082164 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.637254901961 0.561755894193 113% => OK
syllable_count: 498.6 506.74238477 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.7926287054 49.4020404114 93% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.125 106.682146367 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.125 20.7667163134 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.125 7.06120827912 115% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 11.0 5.01903807615 219% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.419002360596 0.244688304435 171% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.123191801258 0.084324248473 146% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0924984017529 0.0667982634062 138% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.271220013128 0.151304729494 179% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.108834646398 0.056905535591 191% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.5 13.0946893788 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 50.2224549098 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.98 12.4159519038 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.97 8.58950901804 104% => OK
difficult_words: 85.0 78.4519038076 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 9.78957915832 72% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.