These days , it is believed that aggressive and determination have an important function to the development of people . Although this idea is reasonable to some extent , i would argue that people who depend too much on money and background .
On the one hand , i am convinced that money and appearance give people some assistances . Firstly , Money give us more opportunity to improve themselves . In my opinion , when person was born in a rich family , this one could attend courses which provides a large amount of knowledges and good experiences . Especially , Student would receive specialise education which contribute them assistance to advance career. Secondly , Money and appearance afford people great environments to study . In my mind , good environments have many talent who could give students encouragements when they facing nervousness .Accordingly , Teenagers don not take mistakes and lost a lot of time to repair it .
On the other hand , it is understandable why most people need aggressive to achieve wonderful success . On top of that , the majority of people would against many difficulty and pressure . To be honestly , Overcoming diverse requirements is not easy and people have to own big efforts . Depending on money of parents only bring bad results and anxieties . Furthermore , Independence life creates people who have confidence . Accordingly , they often pleasant with troubles and easily defeat it . Finally , independence support people more mature and credible .
In conclusion , there may be some reasons to support young people own efforts improving themselves and already facing a challenge. I strongly believe that this policy is not without drawsbacks and thus should not be implemented by the state.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, but, finally, first, firstly, furthermore, honestly, if, may, second, secondly, so, thus, in conclusion, in my opinion, on the other hand, on top of that
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 7.30460921844 164% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 24.0651302605 100% => OK
Preposition: 28.0 41.998997996 67% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.3376753507 132% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1459.0 1615.20841683 90% => OK
No of words: 266.0 315.596192385 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.48496240602 5.12529762239 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.03850299372 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.0963655688 2.80592935109 110% => OK
Unique words: 165.0 176.041082164 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.62030075188 0.561755894193 110% => OK
syllable_count: 456.3 506.74238477 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.2975951904 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 35.4235860667 49.4020404114 72% => OK
Chars per sentence: 85.8235294118 106.682146367 80% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.6470588235 20.7667163134 75% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.76470588235 7.06120827912 138% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 42.0 5.01903807615 837% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.67935871743 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.203670723883 0.244688304435 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0658424880393 0.084324248473 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0532605672355 0.0667982634062 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.112281551274 0.151304729494 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0416134876908 0.056905535591 73% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.2 13.0946893788 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 47.79 50.2224549098 95% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.3001002004 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.21 12.4159519038 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.71 8.58950901804 101% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 78.4519038076 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.1190380762 79% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.