Some people think success in life comes from hard work and determination. Others think money and appearance are more important. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
In contemporary society, people are reaching their success by different ways. There is an interesting debate about whether it is necessary working hard and tolerate for a good future or financial status and appearance play significant role. In my opinion, money and people's looks should be demanded for achieving successful life.
Looking more closely the first view, there are several supportive points for it. Firstly, people can learn everything in their life by overcoming different problems. In order to do it they have to work hardly. As a result, they may gain life experience and it assists to be lucky in life. Secondly, people can be skillful at working in different situations. They know well how operate themselves in various positions. Lastly, the individuals who reached their bright future by working independently never be panic when they face up obstacles in life. They pass the difficulties and continue their ways.
Turning to the next view, some people support the view by some opinions. The first one is that, a lot of celebrities gained their award by beautiful appearance. Because, it plays the main role besides their abilities. The next one is that people may reach anything in life by money. For example, they may study in any places and participate various expensive trainings. As a result, they can find a good workplace.
In conclusion, taking everything into consideration, there are a numerous of paths for prospective life. Although, some people claim that determination and painstaking need for it, I believe financial background and attractive face are more essential.
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...ed their award by beautiful appearance. Because, it plays the main role besides their a...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, first, firstly, if, lastly, look, may, second, secondly, so, well, for example, in conclusion, as a result, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 25.0 24.0651302605 104% => OK
Preposition: 28.0 41.998997996 67% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1348.0 1615.20841683 83% => OK
No of words: 258.0 315.596192385 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.22480620155 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.00778971557 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.89715135407 2.80592935109 103% => OK
Unique words: 155.0 176.041082164 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.600775193798 0.561755894193 107% => OK
syllable_count: 424.8 506.74238477 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 16.0721442886 118% => OK
Sentence length: 13.0 20.2975951904 64% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 31.8814459019 49.4020404114 65% => OK
Chars per sentence: 70.9473684211 106.682146367 67% => OK
Words per sentence: 13.5789473684 20.7667163134 65% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.84210526316 7.06120827912 97% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 8.67935871743 150% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.2011933768 0.244688304435 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0615119327023 0.084324248473 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.05603804583 0.0667982634062 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.12920634388 0.151304729494 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0326280320586 0.056905535591 57% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.9 13.0946893788 76% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 58.28 50.2224549098 116% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 11.3001002004 74% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.4 12.4159519038 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.63 8.58950901804 100% => OK
difficult_words: 71.0 78.4519038076 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 9.78957915832 72% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.2 10.1190380762 71% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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