Some people think that there should be more focus on disease prevention. These people believe that money needs to be spent on public education about preventable diseases such as diabetes, rather than on curing people who already have these diseases.
Do you agree or disagree with this opinion?
It is believed that public education about preventable diseases is more preferred to curing patients with diabetes. In my opinion, I completely disagree with this statement. And this essay will show the reasons for that statement.
To begin with, many people with diabetes are increasing gradually, and this disease is becoming common, especially elderly. Thus, old people need to be cured carefully because this disease may be dangerous for them if they do not cure quickly. Furthermore, the weaker their health becomes, the more diseases they will have. Consequently, it is better to priority for patients and spend more money cure for them, and makes them recover from this disease. For example, my grandma was diagnosed with diabetes when I was little so she was even treated in hospital, even in the house because curing and lying in hospitals was expensive, instead of that, she had to take medicines as prescribed by doctors and healed by herself at home. Until now, she has recovered from diabetes.
Secondly, it is important for the government to invest more money in curing patients. If they spend money on public education, many patients will not be cured better, besides, they will be left behind. Therefore, they also have many dangerous diseases, not only diabetes. Instead of investing money in education, they have to put money into providing more medicines to help patients get well soon from diabetes and other diseases. Not only so, letting them buy their own medicines, but it will also be more people diagnosed with other diseases.
In conclusion, we should make a donation to treat patients with diabetes more than public education. I expect that no patients leave back.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, consequently, furthermore, if, may, second, secondly, so, therefore, thus, well, for example, in conclusion, in my opinion, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 35.0 24.0651302605 145% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 36.0 41.998997996 86% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1419.0 1615.20841683 88% => OK
No of words: 279.0 315.596192385 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.08602150538 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.08696624509 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.60347330539 2.80592935109 93% => OK
Unique words: 154.0 176.041082164 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.551971326165 0.561755894193 98% => OK
syllable_count: 445.5 506.74238477 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 5.43587174349 221% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 0.809619238477 494% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.2975951904 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 55.3272932195 49.4020404114 112% => OK
Chars per sentence: 88.6875 106.682146367 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.4375 20.7667163134 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.8125 7.06120827912 139% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.67935871743 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.9879759519 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.4128256513 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.260331770085 0.244688304435 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0896470588353 0.084324248473 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.089118460745 0.0667982634062 133% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.150997196111 0.151304729494 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0409456682979 0.056905535591 72% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.3 13.0946893788 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 50.2224549098 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.3001002004 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.95 12.4159519038 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.93 8.58950901804 92% => OK
difficult_words: 61.0 78.4519038076 78% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 9.78957915832 72% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.1190380762 87% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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