Some people think that young people should be required to do unpaid work helping people in the community. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?
Young people are intergral part to any society. Some people suggest that the young should take part in volunteer work to help disadvantaged individuals. I believe the benefits from the suggestion would overshadow its drawbacks.
Some may argue that there are other priorities should be considered before joining in volunteer work. First, the young people are not familiar to helping others, thereby they are likely to cause problems rather than provide any assistance. As many immature individuals are yet depending on their families, aiding others while they can not take care of themsleves seems impratical. Likewise, there are other works that youngsters can support with families instead of being volunteers. Doing house chores, looking after younger brothers and sisters and so forth are meaningful things that young people can give their hand to. More importantly, children nowadays facing more pressing school schedule than ever. They have to learn a wide ranges of subjects with heavy load of curriculum content and attending volunteer may disable them to focus on the number one priority. Thus, community work may place young persons at risk of losing study time and their contribution may be unnecessary.
However, young population constitutes a major group of people in any regions or nations, their support not only benefits the community where they live but their emotional and professional development. Even though young volunteers are initially inexprienced and nervous, they will accummulate valuable experience while working voluntarily. As a result, their role will become more significant among other people. Additionally, their working time in voluntary groups encourages them to be self-sufficient and disciplined. The two factors are widely accepted as important when the young enter labor market or move out of their family. Of equal importance is that by witnessing the lives of the inprivileged, disable, and old, who have to struggle with their daily lives, young minds would acknowledge the values of aid, be grateful of their normal life which gives them a sense of happiness. That is why with time and energy dedicating for helping others, young members of community would be more well-rounded and honorable citizens of their living places.
In sum, it is beneficial for their neighborhood and themselves if young people spend time working for the sake of others. I believe this trend has more merits than disadvantages.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible agreement error - use third-person verb forms for singular and mass nouns: 'argues'.
Suggestion: argues
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...familiar to helping others, thereby they are likely to cause problems rather than...
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Message: This verb is normally not used in the progressive form. Try a simple form instead.
...ssistance. As many immature individuals are yet depending on their families, aiding others while ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, likewise, look, may, so, thus, well, while, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 13.1623246493 137% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 7.85571142285 178% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 10.4138276553 144% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 24.0651302605 133% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 41.0 41.998997996 98% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2069.0 1615.20841683 128% => OK
No of words: 384.0 315.596192385 122% => OK
Chars per words: 5.38802083333 5.12529762239 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.4267276788 4.20363070211 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82738993478 2.80592935109 101% => OK
Unique words: 232.0 176.041082164 132% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.604166666667 0.561755894193 108% => OK
syllable_count: 643.5 506.74238477 127% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 5.43587174349 166% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 16.0721442886 124% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.056633257 49.4020404114 97% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.45 106.682146367 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.2 20.7667163134 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.0 7.06120827912 57% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 8.67935871743 161% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.266814210046 0.244688304435 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0851627823831 0.084324248473 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0887755320879 0.0667982634062 133% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.185423289517 0.151304729494 123% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0689482392179 0.056905535591 121% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.6 13.0946893788 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.73 50.2224549098 87% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.98 12.4159519038 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.14 8.58950901804 106% => OK
difficult_words: 111.0 78.4519038076 141% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 9.78957915832 72% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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