There are many people who have protested the conditions of zoos and demand that they should be shut down, as animals are subject to appalling conditions inside artificial captivity, while others believe that the institution of zoos can be beneficial to the conservation of wild animals. In my view, zoos may be the last resort for many species as the practice of poaching continues to threaten their survival, and should therefore be maintained.
On the one hand, many animal activists do have a point in arguing that zoos can be cruel. They are often mockeries of the animals natural habitats, and far too small to accommodate the animals that inhabit them. A lot of the animals in zoos are not as in shape as they would be in the wild, since they have regular feeding hours and no longer have any need to hunt. This in turn leads to them becoming unhealthy and living shorter lives. Many captive gorillas, for example, have been observed to have a lower lifespan than their free-roaming counterparts.
On the other hand, zoos prevent poachers from killing more animals, for they provide security that would not exist in the wild. Poaching has been a huge issue in recent years, and has contributed to a number of species going extinct. Zoos, meanwhile, are controlled places where the animals are under observation and protected by security at all times. Many zoos are currently being used in Africa in order to protect endangered species of rhino, for example, and as they have been shown to save many species from the cusp of extinction, they are a necessary evil for wildlife to continue to exist.
On the whole, I argue that although there are certain moral problems to keeping animals in zoos, the alternative of them potentially getting poached means that the existence of zoos is morally justified.
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- Advertisements are becoming more and more common in our everyday life Is it a positive or negative development 78
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but, if, may, so, therefore, while, for example, in my view, on the whole, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 13.1623246493 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 24.0651302605 91% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 41.998997996 110% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1508.0 1615.20841683 93% => OK
No of words: 309.0 315.596192385 98% => OK
Chars per words: 4.88025889968 5.12529762239 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.1926597562 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.58776669808 2.80592935109 92% => OK
Unique words: 171.0 176.041082164 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.553398058252 0.561755894193 99% => OK
syllable_count: 477.9 506.74238477 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 0.809619238477 494% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 61.8256396831 49.4020404114 125% => OK
Chars per sentence: 125.666666667 106.682146367 118% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.75 20.7667163134 124% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.66666666667 7.06120827912 109% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.67935871743 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.9879759519 201% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.263425852576 0.244688304435 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0970581536819 0.084324248473 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0861878129359 0.0667982634062 129% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.161034486508 0.151304729494 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0900549222159 0.056905535591 158% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.4 13.0946893788 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 50.2224549098 109% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.32 12.4159519038 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.96 8.58950901804 104% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 78.4519038076 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 9.78957915832 143% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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